It is more important for school children to learn about local
history than world history. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is true that some commenters argue that it is more important for pupils learn about their own regional history rather than history of world. Pesonally, I disagree with this view, because I believe schools should teach both national and international history.
On the one hand, teaching national history to students is the best way to maintain traditional values such as the spirit and special personalities. For example, experienced long war, Vietnameses have proved the great properties as a brave, honest and loyal soliders. By educating local history, Vietnameses students would be pound of heroic achievements and encouraged to develop themselves as repays for ancestors’s sacrifices in the past. In addtition, young generation should search in local ancedotes as a way to enrich their knowledges. When children savvy fully about local history, they may foster a sense of belonging.
On the other hand, occurences of world history are factors forming contemporary society. Therefore, to discover the path that world has changed over thousands of year, student have to learn lessons from major events of world history such as world wars or crisis. Moreover, because searching widely in world history, students should be armed with comphensive knowledges about continents, religion and ethic groups across the world.
In conclusion, although local history and world history are completely different, they both provide essential savvy with students. Thus,i argue that they should be taught equally.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, moreover, so, therefore, thus, for example, in conclusion, such as, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1282.0 1615.20841683 79% => OK
No of words: 231.0 315.596192385 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.54978354978 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89854898053 4.20363070211 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85561417848 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 176.041082164 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.632034632035 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 385.2 506.74238477 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.1171439993 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.833333333 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.25 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.83333333333 7.06120827912 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213781448705 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0714196673878 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0669551784152 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131909723514 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0907424289222 0.056905535591 159% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.91 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.36 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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