More children in developed countries are becoming overweight. This is a serious problem for wealthy countries.Discuss some causes and effects of this problem. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experi

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More children in developed countries are becoming overweight. This is a serious problem for wealthy countries.
Discuss some causes and effects of this problem. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Children obesity is becoming a major threat in many developed nations. It has become a serious issue in rich countries. Firstly, this essay will discuss about causes for overweight issues. Secondly, this essay will discuss about the side effects of this problems.
Firstly, food is important to lead a stable and healthy life. Again, it is based on what type of diet is followed. Obese child will become obese adult, if not reforming the food habit. One of the major reasons for this child obesity is due to more consumption of fast food also fried food items. Some occasions it is fine to eat once in a time however following the same routine is primary issue of weight gain. To prove that, Stanford University had done many surveys on childhood obesity and results show that 80% of kids are overweight due to over consuming of inorganic products such as Pizza, KFC chickens, Burger, chocolates, ice creams and eating more fatty products on a flip side 20% of kids are extra weight due to genetic problems.
Secondly, it is obvious that intake of inorganic substance will push to overweight and that will open a way to side effects. Several people eat non nourishments foods just for taste whereas they will not know its impacts. Children will become lazy, over a period there is a chance of inactiveness, also scientists say that children immunity system will be active and will protect against any virus/disease only if they are lively. Local NGO released a video of children obesity and its side effects became famous among parents also it has created lot of awareness same series should be published for international audiences
To Conclude, Overweight is not based on rich or poor country it is major threat to all populations. This issue can be controlled with the guidance of parents, also school should take a responsibilities in teaching good food patterns to childrens

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: these
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, whereas, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1564.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 319.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90282131661 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64557859341 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567398119122 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 494.1 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 84.0874148332 49.4020404114 170% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.266666667 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2666666667 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.86666666667 7.06120827912 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192483516192 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0721581071124 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0628253800058 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131754886934 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0871447019636 0.056905535591 153% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 9.78957915832 51% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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