In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies.Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this

Essay topics:

In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies.
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this

Although working or travelling would be beneficial for young people between finishing high school and starting university studies. Disadvantages of this time-gap seem to be more than its advantages.
On the one hand, students who work between finishing high school and starting academic educations become more familiar with difficulties of real life and society. They even understand how difficult is to find a suitable job after university, which makes them more patient, realistic and industry. If the young people work after high-school, they will learn to earn and save money. Altogether, they learn to live on their own and how to interact with people, which increase their self-confident and interpersonal skills. So when they start their academic studies, they not only have not serious financial problems but also have good working experience.
On the other hand, I believe that any time-gap between the young people's studies might have some negative consequences. At first, this gap between educations may lead to reduction student's enthusiasm to continue their educations, so when they return to study after one year working, they might have limited chance to succeed in top university's competition because they have not constantly concentrated on their lessons. Secondly, students who enter universities immediately after high school have more chances to find an appropriate and related job with a high salary in the future, which are more appreciable in terms of social and psychological.
In conclusion, young people should concentrate on their lessons and future goals after high school rather than working or travelling since advantages of working or travelling can be reached after university years too. Any time gap between high school and academy waste their time and energy and postpone their goals.

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Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 332, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'universities'' or 'university's'?
Suggestion: universities'; university's
...t have limited chance to succeed in top universities competition because they have not const...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, in conclusion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1542.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 283.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.44876325088 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84397641963 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.56890459364 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 468.0 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.094277349 49.4020404114 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.5 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5833333333 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.25 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.319701498205 0.244688304435 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137921374825 0.084324248473 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.138465746552 0.0667982634062 207% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.238427895269 0.151304729494 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106525985684 0.056905535591 187% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.63 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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