Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on the society. Others deny that these factors have any significant influence on people's behavior. What is your opinion?
In this modern era, technology has played a major role in everyone's life, especially in teenagers and youngsters. there is a common belief among people that, the violence shown on television as well as in few computer games is affecting the community. Whereas, other's argue and say these do not affect the individuals behaviour. In this essay we will discuss both of the points and i will state my opinion.
First lets talk about television, nowadays there is a trend for making crime series or a story line based on true events. this type of production is really needed to create awarness amongst every single person, however there are negative side too that cannot be neglected. The type of audience watching such serials will be teenagers and young adults. so there are chances that instead of learning or knowing the good part from that series, they take the negative thing and act accordingly. For example, on crime patrol, there was an episode where a school student cheats in his exam because he failed in his previous one, so by knowing such ways to cheat, other students who are going through such situation might get affected and can act in similar way.
The second thing is gaming, which has been seen to be one of the leading infulential among young adults.
A lot of games are out there in the market attracting young generation. Most of these games are fighting related causing violence. playing such games constantly might affect ones mental behaviour which can leads to a physical fight. For example there was this online game named blue shark which caused a lot of death among teenagers, in that game the gamers were given a task to complete keeping their life at stake. such games should definately be banned.
however other than the dark side there are also some bright sidefor both the series as well as games. The crime serials may help us to stay alert by knowing what king of criminal activities are going around and how to tackle and be safe. And the games that are developed helps in increasing our hand eye cordination and keep our brain steady.
In conclusion, though there are few positive things that can be gained from tv and games, in my opinion disadvantages outweights the advantages.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, first, however, if, may, really, second, so, well, whereas, for example, in conclusion, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 13.1623246493 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1862.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 384.0 315.596192385 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84895833333 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42138631943 2.80592935109 86% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 176.041082164 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.606770833333 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 573.3 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.2868813773 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.0 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2105263158 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.94736842105 7.06120827912 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 11.0 5.01903807615 219% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.112779376386 0.244688304435 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0353235973917 0.084324248473 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0438661084097 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0532068798675 0.151304729494 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0494626997717 0.056905535591 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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