Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on the society. Others deny that these factors have any significant influence on people's behaviour. What is your opinion?
I believe that what we see has a significant impact on what we do and how we behave. computer games these days are significantly vast and violent in nature. Especially the games that involve fights have a huge impact on children today. they spend most of their time on computers playing these games and hence adapt the same culture and behaviour in their personal and daily habits. Our children are the future of the nation and the future voice of the nation and if there upbringing is not done in an appropriate manner and they have been brought up by playing these disasterous games, they implement the same in there behaviour. it is vital to let children play games however there should be appropriate monitoring of the same. they should be a monitor on the kind of games they are playing and how long are they spending on the computers.
Likewise, television has an impact on kids and adults. This impact could be negative or positive. there is so much to see and do on the television these days. there are tv commercials, serials and movies that play an important role in the behaviour of kids and adults. we adapt to what we see and a lot of television these days is violent and negative in nature. For Example, talking about the cartoon shin chan which is very much liked by every kid these days. shin chan is a notorius character and kids follow his sayings and doings. he is violent and the content he speaks is not appropirate for children. kids implement his doings in there daily life which is not a good sign.
adults watch television with not so promising content and relate well with whats's shown on the television. As an end result, it is important to have a filter to television and computer games and decent content should be created and shown on the television.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, however, if, likewise, so, well, for example, kind of, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 10.4138276553 221% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1472.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 319.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6144200627 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50758619436 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 176.041082164 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.457680250784 0.561755894193 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 462.6 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.76152304609 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.5081053695 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.7777777778 106.682146367 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7222222222 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.16666666667 7.06120827912 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 13.0 5.01903807615 259% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16028688654 0.244688304435 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0529299236769 0.084324248473 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0457368819566 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102614466581 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0346024945438 0.056905535591 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 13.0946893788 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.16 12.4159519038 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 8.58950901804 84% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 78.4519038076 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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