Some people feel that entertainers e g film stars pop musicians or sports stars are paid too much money Do you agree or disagree Which other types of jobs should be highly paid

Essay topics:

Some people feel that entertainers (e.g. film stars, pop musicians or sports stars) are paid too much money.
Do you agree or disagree?
Which other types of jobs should be highly paid?

Some people believe that spending too much money on celebrities is a waste of money and it should be paid to other careers.

In my opinion, celebrities have a job the same as other people who live in society. For instance, no difference between a family who wants to eat, drink, or accommodation. Being a superstar in Hollywood or Bollywood is not have a priority for people to have a better lifestyle or not. In addition, If superstars earn more money than others, it's has a negative effect on society because all teenagers are just want to be a superstar in films or teams to earn money and who want to be doctor, engineer or even labor in the society.

Some people think that some advertisement companies want to invest in celebrities because people are interested in them, and it does not matter to invest in doctors or professors because of who is interested in science. Although mass media spend on superstars, they should pay more attention to scientific people to change people's attention to their real heroes. For example, TV shows can invite some philosophies or scientists to their programs to change adolescents' dreams about their future careers and how they can be popular or have a great deal of revenue in their adulthood.

I totally agree with someones who think scientist or doctors are more deserve to earn more money than entertainers, and they have more benefits for our communities; however, they have not many fans in social media.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 224, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'had'.
Suggestion: had
...erstar in Hollywood or Bollywood is not have a priority for people to have a better ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, for example, for instance, in addition, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1214.0 1615.20841683 75% => OK
No of words: 251.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83665338645 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98032404683 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76499764571 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 176.041082164 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.545816733068 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 387.0 506.74238477 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.695110125 49.4020404114 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.888888889 106.682146367 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8888888889 20.7667163134 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.77777777778 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174533996169 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.084600935203 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0945398030638 0.0667982634062 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139521042506 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.11923994694 0.056905535591 210% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 50.2224549098 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 78.4519038076 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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