Some people say that the best way to improve public health us by increasing the number of sports facilities Others however say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required Discuss both these views and give your

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Some people say that the best way to improve public health us by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In recent times, with the changes in lifestyle, all individuals need to focus on their healthiness. While some people believe that, the improvement in sports facilities will tackle the issue of public health, others argue that there are more measures to be taken to improve it. However, I would agree more with the latter view.

Firstly, no doubt increasing sports facilities will have a tremendous role to play in the health of communities. The main reason for this is, it makes the individual be physically fit and mentally stable. To illustrate, every person who does a physical activity such as gym, yoga or outdoor sports for an hour in their adulthood are less likely to have critical heart ailments and diabetics in their later stages of life. As a result, it makes the individual energetic, increases their lifespan and has a positive effect on work productivity, which in turn helps the society as a whole.

Nevertheless, I believe that there are other strong measures needed, such as reducing the consumption of alcohol and tobacco products along with junk food to have a lasting impact on public health. The central reason behind this is, due to urbanization and modern work culture, the stress levels are at all-time high and people are inclined towards instant remedies like smoking to overcome the pressure. This will have an overwhelmingly detrimental impact on the individual's health. Conversely, If following few measures like following the healthy and hygienic diet, a ban on tobacco products by the authorities, will have an encouraging effect on public health.

In conclusion, Although increasing the sports facilities has a vital role to play in improving the health of citizens, I firmly believe that few crucial measures like reduction in nicotine products and following a hygienic lifestyle will have a major impact on public health in the long run.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 465, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...verwhelmingly detrimental impact on the individuals health. Conversely, If following few me...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
conversely, first, firstly, however, if, nevertheless, so, while, in conclusion, no doubt, such as, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1578.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 307.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14006514658 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80893211554 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550488599349 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 495.9 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.0627297552 49.4020404114 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.5 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5833333333 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.25 7.06120827912 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287600744253 0.244688304435 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10489283795 0.084324248473 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0831758644616 0.0667982634062 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182075856525 0.151304729494 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0459260257698 0.056905535591 81% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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