Some people say that money can make life easier and more comfortable. But others say that having a great amount of wealth can bring some problems.What do you think are the advantages and disadvantages of a having a lot of money?

Essay topics:

Some people say that money can make life easier and more comfortable. But others say that having a great amount of wealth can bring some problems.
What do you think are the advantages and disadvantages of a having a lot of money?

Wealth nowadays is considered to be a differentiating factor in leading a comfortable life or a miserable life. Many people opine that money can make life pleasant while others believe that it can bring a plethora of problems. In my opinion, the benefits of having a proliferate amount of money would be that a person can lead a luxurious life while on the other hand, the downside of being rich would be that it increases dependence on many people. In the below paragraphs I will put forward the advantages and disadvantages of being rich with examples.

Firstly with a lot of money, rich people can buy anything in the world from supercars to luxurious watches thus they are able to satisfy their materialistic wishes. Mostly rich people live in plush apartments with many servants who serve them thus leading to a comfortable lifestyle. In countries like China which has the largest millionaires in the world, it is evident from many articles published globally that these rich people spend their money in an alluring environment.

Secondly, on the other hand, having wealth make a person lazy and increase his dependence on the surrounding people like chauffer’s, servants who are ready to serve. This, in the long run, leads to fatigue and makes the person dependent. In India, many rich people are dependent on their staff for even their daily needs thus increasing the risk of diseases.

To conclude it can be seen from the above arguments though there are many downsides of being wealthy the advantages are too many to ignore thus being wealthy helps a person to lead a happy and comfortable life.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, thus, while, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1347.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 273.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93406593407 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7845092798 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 176.041082164 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.52380952381 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 423.0 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.7795957498 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.454545455 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8181818182 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.90909090909 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216110961137 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.092139780444 0.084324248473 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0814657199842 0.0667982634062 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127127564773 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0758607878821 0.056905535591 133% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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