Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time Others say that it is important for children to learn how to preoccupy themselves Discuss both these views and and give your opinion

Essay topics:

Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to preoccupy themselves.
Discuss both these views and and give your opinion.

Every parent wants to raise children who happy and successful. Someone vibe that parents should motivate their children teamwork when their leisure time and whereas others emphasize that free time children knowledge capture themselves. This essay will discuss both the reason in details and I believe that organization work and self-learning both are need to the succession.
On the one hand, the education side by side schoolboys needs group work because of a quick solution. Everyone is not knowing everything that why need for team actions. For example, my cousin Jon, who is a national football team player reason owing to play a local team when he was a school going. Furthermore, group activities grow up leadership and confidence and this is indispensable for the future like a business and any job.
Nevertheless, on the other hand, undoubtedly part of organized teamwork important and self-activities vital role-playing for careening both passing free time. Parents well-known their children weak point of education side when they are increasing self-learning when get leisure time, improving skilled communication by the internet. For illustration that, the current pandemic situation most of all stay home and children learn themselves computer and language by google. So, they are developed to occupy themselves is a better opportunity when getting an ideal time.
In conclusion, this essay discussed that leisure moment involves in any organization work are grow up leadership how to complete job and self-learning promoting skilled like communication development. In my personal opinion, for improving future need to activities both side attach with team and self-learning in leisure time.

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Average: 3.6 (2 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 104, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...ork because of quick solution. Everyone is not knowing everything that why need for team actio...
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Line 4, column 206, Rule ID: PERSONAL_OPINION_FRIENDSHIP[1]
Message: Use simply 'opinion'.
Suggestion: opinion
...d like communication development. In my personal opinion, for improving future need to activitie...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, nevertheless, so, well, whereas, for example, in conclusion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 41.998997996 57% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1412.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 256.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.515625 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91945086607 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.58203125 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 428.4 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.6322808678 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.615384615 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6923076923 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274926861652 0.244688304435 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0977542428153 0.084324248473 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0702407020448 0.0667982634062 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175713289863 0.151304729494 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0888107920344 0.056905535591 156% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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