Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
There are the people who say their children enjoy the organised group works in their extra time, while others are supporting the thought of occupying their kids on their own. In this essay we will discuss both the school of thoughts of parents.
Firstly, we will talk about the children whose parents encourage them to take part in classified group activities. These children learn about the society at a very initial stage of their life, they adapt themselves to work with others in team which influences their team spirit and certainly establish an understanding with others. The best part participating in such group activities is that, children get some social time from their hectic and boring academic schedule, this makes them learn how to keep themselves away from the cell phone and television in their free hours.
Secondly this is for the parents who suggests their children to make them busy with themselves on their own. As we know man is a social animal, so we need to be socialized in one or another way. Children who keep themselves busy in their own work are somehow get separated from the outer world. For instance they feel isolated even if they are present in group of people, because they don’t know what to talk about with others.
To sum up the discussion, in my opinion, it’s important for children to participate in organised group activities for both physical and psychological development. Because children mind is like an empty hard disk of a computer, whatever we write into it they will learn that first and keep there in their mind for the rest of their life. So we should always try to make them comfortable with the society which can be achieved by encouraging them to take part in classified group activities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ke part in classified group activities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, while, for instance, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 24.0651302605 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1459.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 300.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86333333333 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57487648032 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.526666666667 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 439.2 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.8960678464 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.583333333 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.25 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.481209085118 0.244688304435 197% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.173795453315 0.084324248473 206% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.121907978683 0.0667982634062 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.310851949518 0.151304729494 205% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0818427738266 0.056905535591 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 78.4519038076 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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