Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and this money could be better spent elsewhere.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Essay topics:

Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and this money could be better spent elsewhere.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The Citizens of every country pay taxes so that government authorities can utilize this money for various purposes. Some people reckon that spending money on arts is not the best way to use it, despite they should use this money for human welfare. I am a strong advocate of this opinion, and reasons to support this belief will be covered in following essay.

First and foremost factor to consider is that ministry is responsible to take care of citizens who are money deprived and cannot support their career and families. They should, moreover, take initiatives to provide education and jobs to economically challenged but deserving candidates. For instance, local MP from Bangalore took a step ahead, and started free education for children from poor families up to primary school. Apart from that some authorities are working on providing free health services such as free regular checkups and surgeries at low-cost.

Although arts are the way to represent country’s culture across the world but this could be conveyed and showcased with other approaches like novels, social media etc. While higher management could focus on investment of money in development of scientific devices and innovations. Furthermore, nowadays people are suffering from numerous untreatable diseases so government can inspire research fellows to find novel drugs for these ailments by providing them new instruments and labs to work.

In conclusion, instead of investing money in artistic work, government should strive to develop their nation which is not possible without individual prosperity of citizens where they have to build a supporting and courageous pathway for everyone.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 96, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...is responsible to take care of citizens who are money deprived and cannot support their...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, moreover, so, while, apart from, for instance, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1419.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 261.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.4367816092 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0193898071 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80372345732 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.659003831418 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 437.4 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1994477266 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.0 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7272727273 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.90909090909 7.06120827912 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20020032475 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0742062003441 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0589424313648 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12144108421 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0790513213033 0.056905535591 139% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.57 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.34 8.58950901804 120% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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