Young people are often influenced by their peers. Do the advantages of peer pressure outweigh the disadvantages?
Opinions are divided on whether the benefits of peer pressure outweigh the drawbacks. I believe that the positive influence of peers is too significant that its drawbacks could be reduced by parents monitoring their children's activity.
It is a widely held belief that negative peer pressure degrades children's grades and could cause anxiety and depression. With regard to the former, friends could be responsible for diverting youngsters' focus from studies to illegal activities which in turn is harmful from their academic career point of view. Examples of this can be seen in their involvement in illicit activities, such as consuming drugs and getting involved in the robbery. The negative influence could be responsible for anxious behavior and unhappiness. When children participating in activities with which they are not comfortable and that are against their moral values, they feel bad about it and get disturbed.
However, the above-mentioned negative reasons could be minimized by proper parental supervision and turn them into benefits. By keeping an eye on their child's activity and giving them time to time guidance could help them to understand the good and bad aspects of peer pressure and ways to deal with such things in their life. Another advantage of peer pressure is that they always encourage to perform new and creative activities. In fact, they always motivate the youngsters to select the tasks which are beneficial from their career perspective, such as taking part in a science competition and showcase their talent through creativity, not only would which boost their confidence, but also achieve a great height of success.
In conclusion, although the negative effects of peer pressure could not be ignored, they can be reduced by timely parental supervision. I believe that the positive impact of peers is more advantageous than its drawbacks for the reasons mentioned above.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 393, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'performing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'encourage' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: performing
... pressure is that they always encourage to perform new and creative activities. In fact, t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, in conclusion, in fact, such as, with regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1615.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.34768211921 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82512434653 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.55298013245 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 491.4 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.1579764573 49.4020404114 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.230769231 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2307692308 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.76923076923 7.06120827912 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243634135129 0.244688304435 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100677961971 0.084324248473 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0700935475371 0.0667982634062 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179530709692 0.151304729494 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0605088438493 0.056905535591 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.33 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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