54. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The most important aspect of a job is the money a person earns. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
No one can deny that there are both positive and negative aspects about the most important thing that person earns from a job. If i were forced to choose, i would definitely prefer the money that i earn. It is my firm belief for a number of reasons, and i will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
First and foremost, is that you can spent the money you earned on your leisure time activity. It is mostly productive for person, because after that you will work hardly and with great supply of energy. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. You see, my parents work hardly for a year, and climbed the corporate ladder. After a while their company got them a cruise ticket to made them to work more interestingly. As a result they came back with an enormous supply of positive energy, because they knew that their salary will increase. For this reason i think that the money person earns from a job, is the most important thing at all.
Secondly, the money that you earned, can spend on education or sporting activity. Now we live in a society that whether you like or not, you need to learn something new every day. Sport is also an important part of our life, because it makes you to be ready to all conditions. Drawing from my own experience, my father worked as an engineer, but he wanted to become data scientist. So that is why he spent part of his salary on studying data science. Moreover got crossfit classes to be always in tonus. He was as the early bird gets the worm. Now he is working as data scientist and we can say without doubt that he is the capitan of ones own ship. It is certainly clear to see that if you spend your salary in a right way, you will be in a great success.
To make a long story short, in light of above mentioned reasons, i strongly believe that the most improtant aspect of a job is the money the person earns, because it helps him to relax in his free time, and also to wade step by step.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, while, i think, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1642.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 378.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.34391534392 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32376952771 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542328042328 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 519.3 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.2013440617 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.1 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.05 5.45110844103 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201293870133 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0588698022819 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.062131990923 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126045858164 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0348826951221 0.0645574589148 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.5 11.7677419355 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.89 10.9000537634 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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