Agree or disagree? Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize.
Many people adhere to the view that young generation are required to be organised due to the complicated life in modern society. In what follows, I will identify the most conspicuous reasons to justify my point of view.
The first point to be mentioned is that there are too many ways to learn subjects, so children have to choose carefully how to study in their limited time. For example, when I was fourteen, many of students in my school went to a cram school after our school hours. Firstly, I went to one of the most prestigious cram schools, which was located far from my house. However, it was difficult to keep going there in my limited time. Even though the quality of the class was great, I soon realised that it was time-consuming and less effective for me to attend both classes in a day. Then, I began taking part in the online course at home instead of going to the cram school. This could save my time a lot and I could concentrate on my studying, thus my academic assessment has been improved significantly. As this example illustrates, planing the best method to study is regarded as a crucial factor contributing to the thriving of young people.
Another equally significant point to be mentioned is that young people have to organise their time to make succeed in the competitive job market in this society. My personal experience is a compelling example. When I was a junior at my university in Japan, a job market opened around spring season. Compared with Western country, a student in Japanese university starts a job hunting in much earlier period. Thus, while we were taking university's classes, we also had to prepare some application documents such as CVs, recommendation letter and portfolio. Additionally, after my absence of a class due to the job interview, it was necessary to submit an additional essay to catch up in the credit. Thus, we were required to have a great time-management skill to balance both job hunting and studying in the same season. Therefore, my anecdotal experience highlights that the ability of time management is essential for students who are doing a job hunting.
In brief, I strongly agree with the statement that it is essential for young people to have ability of planing and organizing.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, so, then, therefore, thus, while, for example, in brief, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1882.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83804627249 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84362924652 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537275064267 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 595.8 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.3613509968 48.9658058833 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.0526315789 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4736842105 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47368421053 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135243919651 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0456816437858 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0820417848378 0.0737576698707 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140257810364 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.11695368924 0.0645574589148 181% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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