Agree or Disagree? movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
By and large, it is established beyond doubt that entertaining devices have had a profound impact on people's life. Nowadays, there is at least an entertainment device, specifically television, in every individual's house. The ever-increasing prominence of movies and television in this modern era has aroused the longstanding controversy as to whether they affect youngsters in a good way. Although some people are amenable to the idea that television has irreparable repercussions on both the children and their parents, I resolutely possess the conviction that its' merits outweigh its' demerits, provided that using it appropriately. In the subsequence paragraphs, most conspicuous reasons will vindicate my perspective.
First of all, it is significant to be mentioned that movies and televisions can become informative to people. Young people can learn a myriad of instructive things from watching movies and television and improve their knowledge. In addition, they could exploit those information and experiences in their life. Take a personal experience as an example; when I was a child I used to see a television series which learn basic English to children. That program improves my English knowledge, and as a result, when I went to the high school, unlike other students, I didn't have any difficulties in my English courses and always got a high grade. Had my parents not allowed me to watch that program in my childhood, I wouldn't have been able to become a top student in English courses.
Another noteworthy point supporting my stance is that people can get information about the events and activities in the world. Most people like to follow the up-to-date news and events happen in the world, and since televisions are the most popular device, they use it to follow the news and get informed about not only the events of their country but also the events of the rest of the world. Subsequently, movies and televisions affect people by informing them about their surroundings. A relevant study conducted on a group of people, which I have recently read an article about, indicated that most people rely on the televisions for following news and events, rather than from other sources like internet, newspapers, etc. This result may be attributed to the fact that watching televisions and movies is the convenient way for people to increase their knowledge about the world which has positive effects on their social life since the more people get informed, the more they become acquainted with people, countries, and their policies.
To recapitulate, considering the abovementioned reasons, one can effortlessly conclude that using movies and televisions can benefit him in many ways, and its' advantages weigh more than its' disadvantages. It is highly recommended that parents should not prevent their children from watching movies and televisions since it has an inordinate amount of positive effects on them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 338, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...as aroused the longstanding controversy as to whether they affect youngsters in a good way. A...
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Line 3, column 262, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this information' or 'those informations'?
Suggestion: this information; those informations
...wledge. In addition, they could exploit those information and experiences in their life. Take a p...
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Line 3, column 563, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...e high school, unlike other students, I didnt have any difficulties in my English cou...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...o watch that program in my childhood, I wouldnt have been able to become a top student ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, as to, at least, in addition, as a result, by and large, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2465.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 468.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26709401709 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65116196802 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03319097016 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517094017094 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 765.9 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.6356640876 48.9658058833 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.944444444 100.406767564 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.55555555556 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246479095497 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0746515475115 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0625585144475 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149903587669 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0459296370702 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.08 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 86.8835125448 142% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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