It is important to know about events happening around the world, even it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
It is established beyond doubt that events happening around the world affects not only people's life individually, but it also affects and changes a community. The ever-increasing prominence of events' happening around the world has aroused the longstanding controversy as to whether it is important to know about these events, even if we know that it won't affect our daily life. Although some people are amenable to the idea that it isn't important for people who the events don't have any effect on their lives, I resolutely possess the conviction that it is crucial for everyone to be aware of events happening in the world.
First of all, it is significant to be mentioned that knowing about the events occurring in the world helps people developing their social ability. In other words, most of the people often talk about the focal events happening in the world. Since these events are the common subjects that people always talk about and exchange their opinions, knowing about these events can definitely help someone to develop and strengthen his social skills. Results of a study conducted on a group of people aged 18 to 30, which I have recently read an article about, indicate that the more people know about the events happening around the world, the more successful they are in their social life and career. This result may be attributed to the fact that knowing about the events around the world helps people socialize with others and fortify their social abilities.
Another noteworthy point supporting my stance is that knowing about what's happening around the world helps people to understand other people's feelings and emotions and help them since human beings are members of a whole, even if it isn't related to them. A prime example of that, when a dangerous earthquake occurred in Iran and destroyed a large number of people's houses, and an inordinate amount of people became homeless, people from other countries got notified from the international news and help the homeless people by building homes and affording life appliances, even it wasn't their duty to help.
To recapitulate, considering the mentioned reasons above, one can effortlessly conclude that knowing about the events around the world can benefit him in many ways, from fortifying and maintaining his social abilities in order to become successful in life to understanding people's feeling and help them even if it doesn't affect their life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, then, as to, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2034.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 401.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.072319202 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61888370774 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.493765586035 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 633.6 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 36.0 20.1344086022 179% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.990538776 48.9658058833 155% => OK
Chars per sentence: 184.909090909 100.406767564 184% => OK
Words per sentence: 36.4545454545 20.6045352989 177% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.54545454545 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.376300988026 0.236089414692 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.194654592583 0.076458572812 255% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101649499071 0.0737576698707 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.259810017324 0.150856017488 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115222117657 0.0645574589148 178% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.7 11.7677419355 176% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.94 58.1214874552 60% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.3 10.1575268817 170% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.72 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.4 10.0537634409 163% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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