Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
By and large, it is established beyond doubt that in this modern era, planning plays a pivotal role in individuals' success, specifically for young people, in life and career. The ever-increasing prominence of planning and organizing has aroused the longstanding controversy as to whether the young people's ability to plan is essential in their lives. Although some people amenable to the idea that people can be successful without the ability to plan, I resolutely possess the conviction that they need to have this ability in order to become successful in this modern life. In the subsequent paragraphs, the most conspicuous reasons will vindicate my perspective.
First of all, it is significant to be mentioned that in the modern era, people's needs are more variable than the past. In the past, people were just worried about their simple needs and how to satisfy them; for example, their needs to provide food and safety for themselves. But with the advancement of technology, their needs have become more complicated and tried to satisfy higher needs such as their cognitive and self-actualization needs since they want to achieve their full potential. As a result, people, especially youngsters, need to satisfy their needs by allocating their time and perfect planning in their life since they have limited time in their life and should use it wisely. A prime example of that, when I was a child, I didn't have to be worried about my needs because they were basic ones. But when I grew older, and life became more complicated, I realized that I need to satisfy my esteem needs in order to become successful in my life. So, I learned how to plan to achieve my needs and goals.
Another noteworthy point supporting my stance is that nowadays companies become more complicated and their projects are of high importance for the government. So having the ability to plan and organize becomes a fundamental factor for companies, and they prefer hiring young people who have these abilities. planning helps companies to organize their works and projects appropriately and finish them in the time that is supposed to be finished, resulting in the success and prosperity of that company. Take a personal experience as an example, I worked on a project in my field of expertise which was related to the IranZamin construction company, and because of my lack of responsibility and not organizing my works, I couldn't have finished that project in the due date and got fired. Had I realized the importance of work and used to plan and organize, I would have finished that project in the specific time and wouldn't have gotten fired.
To recapitulate, considering the abovementioned reasons, one can effortlessly conclude that learning the ability to plan and organize can benefit him in many ways, from satisfying their higher needs to becoming successful in their career. It is highly recommended that governments should put more emphasis on the youngsters' planning and organizing abilities and helps them to learn that ability. Failing to do will definitely sow the seeds of ignorance.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 275, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...as aroused the longstanding controversy as to whether the young peoples ability to plan is es...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 299, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
...ing controversy as to whether the young peoples ability to plan is essential in their l...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 741, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
... example of that, when I was a child, I didnt have to be worried about my needs becau...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 309, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Planning
... young people who have these abilities. planning helps companies to organize their works...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 721, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...sibility and not organizing my works, I couldnt have finished that project in the due d...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 916, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...d that project in the specific time and wouldnt have gotten fired. To recapitulate, c...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, as to, for example, such as, as a result, by and large, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 13.8261648746 203% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2582.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 510.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06274509804 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75217629947 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91057346729 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.464705882353 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 819.9 618.680645161 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.0940808843 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.894736842 100.406767564 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8421052632 20.6045352989 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.63157894737 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213314835681 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0768239980962 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0529195712476 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140131086528 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0677322749465 0.0645574589148 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 11.7677419355 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 86.8835125448 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.002688172 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.