Agree or disagree?
For success in future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.
Humans face a lot of concerns in their lives. One of the most important of these concerns is being successful in future job. So what factors cause individuals to be successful in their future job has always been a controversial question among people. In this regard, the ability to relate well to people and also to study hard in school are considered two determined factors. Some believe that the first factor, the ability of communicate well is more important than the second one; however I partially agree with this opinion because although for being successful in future job individual should be a social person, being skillful is another prerequisite which would not obtain except by studying hard in school.
First of all, people would have to be social if they want to be successful in their future job. According to psychologists, human is a social creature. So being among people and doing collectively is necessary for them. In fact, in this way they can share their information with each other and thereby, learn new tips. For example, a clothing retailer needs to communicate well with people both for attracting customers and for knowing about their needs. This subject is so important that Steve Jobs, the most famous entrepreneur of contemporary century, has emphasized it in his speeches over and over. He believes that your products and your behaviors will determined your success, so how interacting with other people is half of career success. Thus, being a social person is a basic need for individual to be successful in his job.
On the other hand, studying hard in school helps people to be skillful and therefore, be successful in their future job. As it is clear for everyone, each career needs its special expertise and only when people are skilled, can they be successful in that career. So they have to study hard in school to learn essential tips to be an expert in their field of study. In addition, nowadays having a high GPA and graduating from a good university are regarded as positive points in most of companies and institutes for hiring individuals which none of them wouldn’t obtain except by studying hard. A research done in the university of Georgia shows that more than 70% of those who had studied hard in school and had earned good scores during their study became successful in their job. Hence, studying hard during school year is the other required factor which can end in people’s career success.
In summary, based on aforementioned reasons, both the ability to relate well to people and study hard in school are important for being successful in future job because the first one is a characteristic of a social person and being social is a need for being successful in job and also the second one prompts people to be skillful and as a result, successful in their field.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, however, if, second, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, in addition, in fact, in summary, as a result, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 35.0 15.1003584229 232% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 75.0 52.1666666667 144% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2355.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 483.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87577639752 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68799114503 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70413190184 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.44099378882 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 720.9 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 83.6543334203 48.9658058833 171% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.75 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.15 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.95 5.45110844103 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.437158204745 0.236089414692 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.14450549365 0.076458572812 189% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10769617153 0.0737576698707 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.323865801648 0.150856017488 215% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0867224725748 0.0645574589148 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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