being away of others
In this day and age of industrialization, maintaining and strengthening relationships are among controversial issues. In this regard, countless individuals believe that being away from others can enhance their relationships. Meanwhile, others holding the opposite view argue that staying with others fulfill the mentioned objective. I, personally, utterly agree with the latter group for two substantial reasons, on which I will elaborate in the following essay.
To begin with, staying close to other people assist a person to comprehend them fully having a direct impact on the relationships with them. To be more specific, when an individual has the others along with him, it provides him with a golden opportunity to know them well-rounded. In this regard, having long time surveillance, the person can adjust his expectation with the abilities of the other populace assisting him to strengthen connections. On the other hand, provided people do not meet each other frequently, they may lose interest because they forget the traits of each other leads them to cut the relationship.
Another noteworthy point is that closeness creates emotional bonds between mankind. To put it in a more vivid picture, being afraid of loneliness, is the fuel of an inherent zeal in humans for relating to the ones whom they have frequent interactions with. In this regard, having others along with them, they feel safe and sound, so it is one of the biggest stimuli of forming relationships. On the contrary, individuals who live far from each other will find others to create connections, which diminishes the old ones.
In conclusion, staying with others are the key point to have satisfying relationships. This is because not only do people who live away forgot the personality of each other, but also they naturally from new ones.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, then, well, while, in conclusion, on the contrary, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1538.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 293.0 407.700716846 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24914675768 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04140951095 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.58361774744 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 465.3 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.4368477097 48.9658058833 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 109.857142857 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9285714286 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.64285714286 5.45110844103 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.323581872959 0.236089414692 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115081581058 0.076458572812 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0939236280897 0.0737576698707 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214751710059 0.150856017488 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0406028311657 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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