Some people believe that spending time away from people we care about helps us
improve our relationship with them because being away from these people makes
us realize how important they are to us. Other people believe that to improve
our relationships with the people we care about, we should spend as much time
with them as possible because spending time apart can damage or harm a relationship.
Without a shadow of a doubt, relationships and intimate people around individuals play a pivotal role in their lives. An unanswered question in this area is which approach is the best to improve relationships with life's companions. Despite all the arguments asserting that devoting a substantial amount of time to being with people we care about will boost the bond, I believe otherwise, maintaining that keeping an appropriate distance and being away from them benefits both connections and individual characteristics. In the subsequent paragraphs, I will elaborate on my viewpoint.
First and foremost, regarding human nature, in order to genuinely grasp the precious of their assets, they have to be deprived of it. To put it more simply, an individual does not understand how invaluable it is to have others around them who care about them. Therefore, people usually underestimate their emotional attachment to their surrounding individuals, which this misconception seeds the plants of inappropriate behavior because they seem ordinary. As a result, getting away from these kind and caring people will help you realize how the world makes you miserable without them. For example, when a person is with their friends all day, they might think not being together will not have any sentimental effects, yet, they do not appreciate it. Moreover, if one thinks about how beautiful it is to have friends and relatives, who may go through troubles in order to make them feel better, the number of fights and arguments will decrease.
Another reason is that devoting time to be with close people can make one mentally dependent on them, to an extent which the person will not be able to make decisions on their own or feel freestanding. In other words, an individual's personal choices can be tremendously impressed by close people surrounding them and thus make one feels incompetent without others. Consequently, the relationship starts to become a source of decisions for life and can eventually lead to a hazardous relationship, not to mention poor choices made by others. My personal experience is an excellent example of this. I remember being so close with one of my friends in high school, which we thought the more we interfered in each other's lives, our friendship became more stable. This mindset not only did dilute our relationship but also exerted an adverse influence on our personal lives. Afterward, we tried to spend some time away from each other, which helped us rebuild a healthy friendship in the long run and led us to correct our attitudes as well.
Reflecting upon all reasons mentioned above, one soon realizes that spending time away from intimate people around us brings about enhancements in both relationships and personality. There are two grounds, not only does it help you appreciate the moments you share with people you love and find out how valuable it is, but it also helps you grow more independently.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an individual' or simply 'individuals'?
Suggestion: an individual; individuals
...n or feel freestanding. In other words, an individuals personal choices can be tremendously im...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...also helps you grow more independently.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2463.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 482.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10995850622 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68556276237 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91636975502 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53112033195 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 761.4 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.5631554772 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.631578947 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3684210526 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.78947368421 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.423497450547 0.236089414692 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116019391787 0.076458572812 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0867468437869 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.250529608828 0.150856017488 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0292395279288 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 11.7677419355 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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