A company is going to give some money either to support the arts or to protect the environment. Which do you think the company should choose? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
A company faces the dilemma whether to invest money in the arts or to supply environment protection. Personally, I believe that a collapse of the nature is a trending problem, which requires full focus nowadays. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, humanity’s comfort and overall existence are tightly attached to environmental conditions. Due to an industrial development, overcrowded cities and oceans full of garbage, humanity stands at that point, when consequences can be irreparable. Even though a lot of activists and nature-lovers put all their effort, it is simply not enough from a perspective of a current society. My own experience is a compelling example of this. Since my childhood, I have been living in a Lithuanian village for many years where people’s life directly depends on the nature. In order to increase funding’s, a government has decided to cut down forests and to dig lakes in order to receive materials for the building. Continuously, lives of all farmers and other citizens is under a big pressure, as it brought harmful consequences to their daily routine. The point is that for these people from their perspective a support of the arts is not that important, as it does not influence their daily habits and won not increase the level of income.
Secondly, the arts have so many branches, that in our time every person is able to represent his thoughts and a vision. Furthermore, the inspiration is the most important aspect, as without it the whole process is a simple waste of a time and a money. For instance, my cousin is a professional artist and he never has required any kind of support, as everything what he needs are his head, piece of a paper and the imagination.
In conclusion, I believe that a modern society has so many problems, which should be solved as soon as possible, that supporting the art in this case is illogical, as the environment is a matter of life and death for many people. In order to make our children happy we have to be more careful with the resources that we take from the nature and if it is possible to restore them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 244, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'money'.
Suggestion: money
...process is a simple waste of a time and a money. For instance, my cousin is a professio...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1797.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 374.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80481283422 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99093184654 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.57486631016 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 575.1 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.7560865853 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.3125 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.375 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.110901012973 0.236089414692 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0332978015211 0.076458572812 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0386563568239 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0695085892662 0.150856017488 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.025931671112 0.0645574589148 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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