Compare and contrast your way of life with that of your parents. Which way of life do you think would be more satisfying to future generations?
Though my parents' opinion about the way of conducting our lives is mostly similar to mine, there are still some valuable differences. They are mostly concerned about efficient education and successful career, when for me the most important thing in the whole life process is to gain as much experience and emotions as possible.
First and foremost, if we compare our lifestyles by defining the similarities, it can be said that my parents support me in a great deal of goals and choices I make. They have already lived a solid amount of time, making lots of mistakes and loosing opportunities. Thereby, they share my idea of travelling around the globe as the main action. My mom ensured me a long time ago, that it's important to visit different places and to meet new people, because it increases knowledge and develops a person as a personality. My dad, though, is a little bit aware of me being injured or kidnapped while exploring our world. But even considering those risks he supports me in this aspect.
However, there is a valid point in which we can't come to an agreement. My concern about my future career is not as big as my parents would like me to have. Of course, I understand the highly importance of finding a well-paid job, especially considering the norms and needs of contemporary lifestyle of a society. My family isn't rich and consequently, this condition have a big impact on their view of the situation. Honestly, a little bit earlier I shared their value completely. Nevertheless, right now my consciousness have gone through some meaningful changes and I changed my mind. The idea of earning as much money as possible has evaporated, being replaced by the idea of earning just a sufficient amount of money needed for comfortable life, without strict managing of profit. Also, I changed my vision of the type of job I want to have. I've seen a lot of suffering of my parents after their jobs, and how exhausted they were. That's why I chose for myself to run my own business, even if it won't be very successful. The freedom to make choices and to decide on your life is the most important part of my vision of a life process.
To sum up, I can't say exactly whose way of life will be more relevant for future generations. But, in most cases, people would probably listen to my parents' thoughts. Money and physical goods have already started to replace emotions and experience. Nevertheless, I want to believe that situation will change and more people will grasp the importance of process, instead of being excessively concerned about physical items.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, honestly, however, if, nevertheless, so, still, well, while, of course, in most cases, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2133.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 448.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76116071429 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77962557899 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5625 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 684.0 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.8819983734 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.7391304348 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4782608696 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5652173913 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149684337183 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0418092975276 0.076458572812 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0568743675337 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0961539223584 0.150856017488 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0447286059558 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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