A/D? Improving schools is the most important factor in the successful development of a country?
Throughout history, education has played a prominent role in all societies. Due to its paramount importance, scholars have tried to elevate the effectiveness of educational systems. For more than a decade(century), it's been thought that better future of a country relies mostly on (ties up with\bound to) its educational system. But recently a heated debate among people cast/throw a doubt on whether the improvement of schools is an important factor in the success of developing countries or not. At first glance/sight, it might seem that there is no bond (connection) between the school’s improvement which results in (lead to) a better education and countries development. But in meticulous study, you will be able to find out a delicate connection between the development of a country and its education rate which stems/is stemming from the school’s improvement. Regarding this, I can tell you half a dozen cases to champion this agenda, but in what follows, I will try to further elaborate on the most important reasons that will aptly elucidate my perspective.
The most significant reason to champion this agenda roots completely in the belief that education can equip future citizens with all they require to take their place in adult society . Normally it has been vindicated that not only does the professional educational system pave the way for enhancing students’ abilities and capabilities (talents), but also it reforms/changes a clumsy-awkward person into a veteran-sophisticated one, which is completely sensible upon their characteristics after graduating from the school. Throughout this trend, anyone who enters adult society after graduating from school would be a useful person for society rather than being a doormat.
Finally, the last exquisite reason sheds the light on the direct relation (ring connection, bond) between the illiteracy and juvenile delinquency and their reverse relation with the development of a country. Since the rate of education is associated with (connected with\ ties up with\ ascribed to\ attributed to) development of a country and which is reversely tied up with juvenile delinquency rate, in successful development countries this (education) acts as a break on the rate of juvenile delinquency. In 2015, the largest survey over 16000 criminals , Dr. Tomas wehr research psychiatrist at mental health department of Harvard university found that, out of %2 of criminals were uneducated (illiterate). The result indicates that the more cultivated citizens are, the less/lower juvenile delinquency rate is and the more successful the country becomes.
In the end, owing to the mentioned reasons, I firmly believe that putting an end to illiteracy by improving schools should be regarded as one of the government’s top priorities. Since illiteracy can play havoc (have a widespread damage in long term) in contemporary era, just like the cancerous diseases, preventing it in early ages (in its infancy) rather than letting the cancer to become widespread and infect the whole world seems to be a wise decision and also the only way to become immune (to fight against) against the disastrous effects of illiteracy.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'if', 'regarding', 'so']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.256830601093 0.229887763892 112% => OK
Verbs: 0.138433515483 0.158761421928 87% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0874316939891 0.0866891130778 101% => OK
Adverbs: 0.040072859745 0.046263068375 87% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0346083788707 0.0685040099705 51% => OK
Prepositions: 0.138433515483 0.118717715034 117% => OK
Participles: 0.0455373406193 0.0351676179071 129% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.22196319725 2.67179642975 121% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0291438979964 0.0309702414327 94% => OK
Particles: 0.00728597449909 0.00188951952338 386% => OK
Determiners: 0.111111111111 0.0887237588012 125% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.016393442623 0.0209618222197 78% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0127504553734 0.0139019557991 92% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3161.0 2387.08602151 132% => OK
No of words: 497.0 408.028673835 122% => OK
Chars per words: 6.36016096579 5.86048508987 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72159896747 4.48200974243 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.396378269618 0.338922669872 117% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.317907444668 0.251872472559 126% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.251509054326 0.174417080927 144% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.191146881288 0.112833075102 169% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.22196319725 2.67179642975 121% => OK
Unique words: 275.0 212.727598566 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553319919517 0.524397521467 106% => OK
Word variations: 68.1895993618 59.2087087015 115% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6684587814 77% => OK
Sentence length: 31.0625 20.5533526081 151% => OK
Sentence length SD: 77.283543486 48.84282405 158% => OK
Chars per sentence: 197.5625 120.699889404 164% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.0625 20.5533526081 151% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.4375 0.644075263715 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.54480286738 90% => OK
Readability: 62.8532444668 45.7405998639 137% => OK
Elegance: 2.06837606838 1.45489161554 142% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.493858262888 0.300154397459 165% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.131979754764 0.103427244359 128% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0914467918901 0.0752933317313 121% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.543962228224 0.497263757937 109% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.163571144971 0.151897553556 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.185669693653 0.114077575197 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10431372106 0.0781384742642 133% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.310236954142 0.336927656856 92% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.049753295228 0.067059652881 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.310111704648 0.210909579961 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0892266748699 0.0618886996521 144% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8870967742 109% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.86379928315 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.91756272401 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 13.0 8.42114695341 154% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.75985663082 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 15.0 13.6433691756 110% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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