Describe one of the most important days in your life and why it was so important to you. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
During our lives we have lived a lot of important things, but some may ask me: what is Your most important day in your life? I think that was day when I have received my United States Immigrant Visa, which I will explain why this day was so special for me in two reasons.
Firstly, it was the day when whole my life made a turnover. In the day when I have received positive answer about my US Visa I was 27 years old, with profitable work, small but well-developed home and bright future in front of me. But to be honest, I love challenges. Thus, I have not thought so long to leave everything behind, my parents, brothers, really good job and my beautiful home. I took my chance and after 1 year of preparation, finally have landed in Los Angeles airport to start with new live. I remember when I was driving through Santa Monica and Venice for the first time. It was amazing and unforgettable experience.
Secondly, I always wanted to live in United States. I remember when I was young, watching all these beautiful places in movies like beaches in California or screen flashing Times Square in New York. It was my dream to be able to live and work completely legal but It took a lot of time and money to make this dream come true, and of course a lot of nerves, because there was no guarantee that I would get necessary Visa. But I am the person who put all focus and energy to accomplish achieves, even when I know that It will cost me enormous amount of resources. Thus, I was very excited when I have received information that I could migrate to United States.
In conclusion, the day when I received Information was the best day in my life, I have always dreamed about living in United States and to change my life completely and definitely I can say that my dreams comes true.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, thus, well, i think, in conclusion, of course, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1463.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 333.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.39339339339 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50758123284 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.558558558559 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 471.6 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.0002380947 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.5333333333 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.6 5.45110844103 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177258826069 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0611611074698 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0747663576142 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131602317458 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101837189742 0.0645574589148 158% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.18 10.9000537634 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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