Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
Children’s advertisements have become common discussion topic about media. Some people believe that television commercials for children should be banned, other disagree with that. In my opinion, these advertisements are not dangerous for them.
First of all, these children are too young to be harmed by any kind of advertisements. Evidence shows that children between age two and five are not able to understand what is happening around them without help of their parents. And because of that, there is no reason to prohibit commercials. For example: When me and my 4 year old brother were watching advertisements, I have noticed that my brother did not understand them, so he started to ask me questions to explain him what these commercials means.
Secondly, it supposed to be parents’ decision if they are allowing his child to watch advertisements, or not. Parents are the first and only people who should be able to decide how they want to rise their children. Therefore, it is their responsibility to protect children and select good advertisements from bad one. For instance, When I was young, my mother allowed me to watch advertisements but she also warned me that their purpose is to force You to purchase products. Because of this, I was prepared to select what is good for me and what is not.
Last reason is that government cannot censore any kind of media and force people what is good or wrong. We are living in democratic country, where everyone has right to decide what they want to do with life. Consequently, there is no option to prohibit them. I remember when government tried to block freedom of speech in television. People were so angry, that they came out on the streets and they were fighting for theirs rights.
In conclusion, Nobody have rights to prohibit basic human rights like freedom to speech, and advertisements are examples of people’s viewpoints. Therefore advertisement’s ban is not good idea.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 488, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'commercials'' or 'commercial's'?
Suggestion: commercials'; commercial's
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Line 9, column 23, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'Nobody' must be used with a third-person verb: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...theirs rights. In conclusion, Nobody have rights to prohibit basic human rights l...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1643.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 324.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07098765432 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1095843672 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.561728395062 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 499.5 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.0792929278 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.4736842105 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0526315789 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.73684210526 5.45110844103 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160383686384 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.050739927842 0.076458572812 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0464199228837 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0925150534799 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0461580550314 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.83 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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