Do agree and disagree with the following statements? Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now.
No one can deny there are both positive and negative aspects of being famous in the world or in your city. If I were to choose I would definitely select to be famous. It is my firm belief that everything in the world has its hardness and maybe athletes and celebrities deserve less privacy for a number of reasons and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
In the beginning, I think have less privacy can help people be more famous. I mean, if people be curious about personal things in life of celebrities, they can show off themselves more and sometimes represent hidden parts of their personal life for being more in the eye watch. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own experience. You see, my uncle is an artist in theatre, but she was not so famous. But after her divorce, she becomes more popular and famous. Especially, in the magazines. As a result, no privacy for entertainers and athletes have an important role in becoming more famous.
Secondly, I think no career in the world hasn't any negative aspects or low point. This issue has happened for entertainers too. Drawing from my own expertise, when I was fascinating with my uncle's job. I all the time have a dream to be a famous artist in future. So, from my teenage age until now, I know that my personal life in this world can't be hidden behind the curtain anymore just like a teacher that she or he must wake up in the morning earlier for going to his or her classes soon. So, it is certainly clear to see why I think every job has its own negative point.
In the light of the above-mentioned reasons, I strongly believe that famous people don't deserve any privacy. Because not only do these people choose their career with all the aspects of it, even with negative aspects but also, this low point help them to be more famous.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, second, secondly, so, i mean, i think, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1532.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 341.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.4926686217 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50315544622 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.527859237537 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 495.0 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.6579786368 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.1111111111 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9444444444 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.88888888889 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228372696989 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0754597618377 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0746569412216 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13648091812 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0657693767808 0.0645574589148 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.76 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.08 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 86.8835125448 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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