Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends
Friendship is one of the most precious experiences in the life. If a person wants to have a happy life, he should make sure to find good friends who can help him to be happy and obtain the goals he has. In my view, people should find many new friends, and I would like to elaborate on my opinion with the following reasons.
First and foremost, the life situations change, and as the result, people need new friends to be happy in different stages of their life. All people experiences different stages in their life, and these stages may change the way of their thinking. As people enter to a new situation of their life which may be due to graduation of school, starting a new job or getting married, they will need new friends who are in the similar conditions, and can be good friends who understand them fully, and this will consequently lead to having a happy life. As an example, when my brother was ten years old, he used to have some close friends, and never liked to make new ones. As he graduated of the university, he realized that his opinion toward life or political issues is not the same as his friend, and they usually ended up having an argument at the end of each of their talks. He finally decided to make new friends who have more in common with him, and this was due some changes which happened in his life. It really helped him to be happier, and that is why I believe it is important to always find new friends.
Second, new and different friends can help people to achieve different goals which lead them to have more happiness in their life. One of the most important advantages of having many friends is that people can ask them for help, and as much as people find more new friends, they can receive more helps. If we always stay by some old friends, we will have a great and strong friendship, but by finding new friends we can meet different people who may become better friends for us, and they may have this ability to help us in a better way. My own experience is a compelling example of this point. I always liked to make new friends, but my old friends did not like it, and they were thinking I am not loyal to them. One time when I found a new friend, introduced her to my old friends, and she could help two of us to start our dream job, and all of us were thankful of her. This happening could change my friend’s opinion toward finding new friends, and after that they all agreed that we should always try to find new friends.
The bottom line is that although old friends are really valuable, and can remember us so many good memories of the past, but new friends can open the doors of new chances to us. As we find more and more new friends, we find bigger chances to experience new positive challenges in our life, and it finally leads to a happy life, and that is why my conviction is that for having a happy life finding new friends is more important compared to staying by some old friends.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 667, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ends, and never liked to make new ones. As he graduated of the university, he real...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, finally, first, if, may, really, second, so, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 9.8082437276 234% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 28.0 13.8261648746 203% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 76.0 43.0788530466 176% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2395.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 552.0 407.700716846 135% => OK
Chars per words: 4.33876811594 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84713113593 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.30635722139 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.385869565217 0.524837075471 74% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 720.9 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 21.0 1.86738351254 1125% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.6721171641 48.9658058833 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.052631579 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0526315789 20.6045352989 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.89473684211 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209913733178 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0805323236908 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.046455584157 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152629987085 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.017488124948 0.0645574589148 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.42 58.1214874552 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.48 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.76 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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