Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? After completing high school, students should take at least a year off to work or travel before they begin studying at a university. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Having great experience and mindset can make people be prepare for their future. Thorough internship or traveling people can always secure the knowledge which is not been taught in the academic class. People can become mature thorough encounter adverse situation in working or traveling , which is extremely useful in the future career. In my perspective, students should travel or do some job before college.
To begin with, people can know the content of the job, which is relate to their faculty’s domain, thorough taking the internship.This can ensure if they have the enthusiasm in this sphere. Many of the college students do not like their faculty. The reason of it is that they do not actually know after they graduate from the faculty what kind of job can they take. Provided that students spend a year to do some job ,they can know more about their future and make sure that they like this scope. Besides, they will also know why they need the knowledge in the course in turn have more motivation in learning those knowledge. For example, the student ,who apply for the faculty of the computer science, can go to the company , such as Google, to do some internship, which can make them know if this job correspond with their imagine. After that they can decide carefully whether they want to major in this faculty.
In addition, students can also consider the thing comprehensively thorough traveling. Students can learn plenty of culture from different city, which can widen their horizon. This can let them have some astonishing idea because they can employ different aspect to grapple with one question. To illustrate, students can travel to other country and know about the job there. This can make them have more choices after graduating. They can decide whether they want to work abroad or in their country.
To sum up, traveling or working before studying university can let students ensure if they like the domain of their faculty. Moreover, they can also think one question in different ways, which can make them secure gorgeous future. On the contrary, without those experiences students may hate their faculty or consider a problem in scare way. It is evident that having the experience about traveling or working before studying university have more benefits.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, if, may, moreover, so, thus, for example, in addition, kind of, such as, on the contrary, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 25.0 9.8082437276 255% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1910.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 381.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01312335958 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49503184197 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.461942257218 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 592.2 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.1094616304 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.9523809524 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1428571429 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.61904761905 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160296954251 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0689706358955 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0498378572182 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117353670944 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0301019982398 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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