Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? All students should be required to study art and music in secondary school. Use specific reasons to support your answer.
Nowadays, students have to study many subjects in secondary school. Of all subjects which include social science, natural science, etc., students also study subjects that require and develop their creativity, such as art and music. Many people look down on these subjects because of many reasons. In contrast, I personally agree with the statement that art and music should be a requirement in secondary school. There are many reasons for my point of view.
First, as I have mentioned, art and music can enhance the development of students' creativity, an important factor that is highly appreciated by many recruiters in this modern world. When a lot of people have become much more stable with their conservative thoughts, those with creative ideas turn out to be a precious gift for life. In the other word, art and music are very important to help people; especially students in secondary schools entirely develop. It seems to be certain that everyone all over the world have heard about Mozart, a genius musician who was born and grown up in the rhythm of music and many scientific documents have proved that what made Mozart become genie is music and art. Therefore, if students in secondary schools are required to study these subjects, their future seem to be brighter because they are potential to be many other Mozart. In addition, the world needs their ability to be better for people to live.
Second, no one can deny that art and music also have the ability to help people relax. Nowadays students are always in stuck with so much homework from their teachers, and with numerous extra classes to keep up with or even outdo their peers at school. They seem to have no free time at all for sport, sleeping, or even relaxation. That is one of the reasons why students should be required to study art and music at secondary schools as a way for them to rest. They need to take a rest to continue climbing so many mountains that this tough life force them to. By taking advantage of time in class with many friends, they can have happy time to balance their study and entertainment. In my opinion, it is very crucial for secondary school students nowadays. Nobody wants our new generation will be bookworms who just know to study, eat, and sleep, without ability of music or art. This is really a tragedy.
In conclusion, so that students can develop all their potential such as creativity, adults, especially educationists should create good conditions for students in secondary school to study art and music. It will be better if they are required to study these subjects. Together we hope that in the future there are more and more genies appearing by this change and helping others so that the world will be a better place for people to live in.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, look, really, second, so, therefore, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2288.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 478.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78661087866 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67581127817 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47616745446 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.460251046025 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 713.7 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.9784315955 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.4782608696 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7826086957 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.08695652174 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.322906913915 0.236089414692 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113989921607 0.076458572812 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108066678162 0.0737576698707 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.234616205464 0.150856017488 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.039432829191 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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