Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
“Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past”. Use details and example to support your answer.
Human has traveled a long way breaking almost all the borders of the past to make us proudly declare that “after all, the world is flat”. Skeptics, however, raise a question that whether tied with the tremendous changes was our improvisation in happiness. From my point of view, such kinds of changes bring to humans delight and satisfaction than to motivate a nostalgia of the happiness in the old days.
On the one hand, humans have a misconception of comparing the happiness among the ages due to a main reason: the nostalgia. It is inevitable that at some certain periods of the lifetime, we all long to a trip down memory lane. On the mental aspect, the past plays a crucial role in one’s soul or in other word, it is our secret garden to hide away whenever the adult’s burdens over us reaches its peak. According to a research, a high percentage of the interviewed admitted that not the tremendous changes of the world reduces their feelings of happiness but the desperate need of a mental shelter whenever their life be in the heat of pressures did it. Furthermore, the modern world facilitates us to achieve our goals more and more easier by providing a large numbers of technological innovation. This ideal conditions did contribute to our feelings of overabundance; that we have to no longer pay our endeavor to gain our expectations. As a result, we all become the little runaway trying to escape this reality by deluding ourselves that the world could be better in the past.
On another aspect, the dark chest of wonders is the world we now live in. Indeed, human race has experienced a time that could be considered the golden days thanks to the development of technology. The standard of living has reached the level that our ancestors could never imagine. For example, long-distance travel, an experience that once belonged to a small group of merchants and sailors only, now turned to a daily activity. The experimentation of Hyperloop, a high-speed train moving in a vacuum tunnel, allows humans to travel from San Francisco to Los Angeles within 35 minutes. As launched in the reality, this transportation system facilitates humans to travel around the world by the time that equals to a tenth of the time costed in 19th century. Furthermore, the need of communicating the information is no longer a barrier. As the magical mirror which allows face-to-face conversation that no need to concern about distance, a series of applications like Messengers, Skype, or Google hangout have erased the geographic gaps between us. Despite the astonishing changes we are involve in, human race are bestowed a circumstance in which we could feel full of delight and satisfaction.
In conclusion, even if the wind of change might not carry only the good, it is unacceptable to declare that we could have a happier life in the past. I do trust in the fascinating prospects brought by the tremendous changes to open a new life fulling with delight and prosperity.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 101, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s of the past to make us proudly declare that 'after all, the world is flat&...
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Line 3, column 298, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... plays a crucial role in one's soul or in other word, it is our secret garde...
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Line 3, column 741, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'easier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: easier
...itates us to achieve our goals more and more easier by providing a large numbers of technol...
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Line 5, column 1091, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'involved'.
Suggestion: involved
... Despite the astonishing changes we are involve in, human race are bestowed a circumsta...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, so, after all, for example, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 87.0 52.1666666667 167% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2491.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 507.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91321499014 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74517233601 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97569539766 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 277.0 212.727598566 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546351084813 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 781.2 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 11.0 3.08781362007 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.7648530309 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.619047619 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1428571429 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.04761904762 5.45110844103 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133547049703 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0375918768146 0.076458572812 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0354230937946 0.0737576698707 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0911315142947 0.150856017488 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0366756013967 0.0645574589148 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 132.0 86.8835125448 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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