Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Private time plays an essential part in everybody's life. We all work hard nowadays in the competing environment, and after burning the midnight oil, we need privacy. Although some people would harbor the view that celebrities don't deserve privacy as they are in an entertainment business, I am of the conviction that entertainers and athletes need private space and would develop my ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, without ignoring the fact that celebrities enjoy the people's attention, they do need private space to spend time with their family and friends. While performing, they conquer several challenges such as traveling to new locations, meeting people from different nationalities, etc. so they need to spend time with their near and dears to live a stress-free life. I must say that my opinion on this matter is profoundly influenced my own experience. For example, last year, I traveled from Delhi to Mumbai. In the flight, I met a renowned cricketer name Kapil Dev, who looks energetic and friendly. The referred player played a crucial role in winning the 1983 world cup. But I observed that people in the plane took undue advantage by clicking his photographs without his permission, which I did not appreciate. As we can see from this example, if we don't give entertainers and sportspeople a space, they are frustrated.
Secondly, famous people's children are the most affected in our society due to undesired attention given by photographers. Although children love to get clicked, but if they develop a habit of people around them at all places such as restaurants, fitness clubs, showrooms, etc., they started to feel like celebrities without doing any hard work. Thus, this behavior can ruin their career. Drawing from my experience, I can recall one of the great actors, Dharemder Singh, who used to perform extraordinarily in the nineties from Bollywood. However, his son, who was pictured at a young age, later became a drug-addict because a close attention influenced him. Furthermore, he filed a harassment case against a news channel called Republic TV, but could not win the case. For this reason, had media not given him importance, his career would not have ruined.
In view of the reasons mentioned, I would strongly recommend giving entertainers and athletes a private space. This is because they can live stress-free lives with their parents and family, whereas their children can focus on their careers.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, thus, whereas, while, for example, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2062.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 401.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1421446384 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87301926768 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.600997506234 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 616.5 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.0465542907 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.1904761905 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0952380952 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.52380952381 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.125289905337 0.236089414692 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0319791077115 0.076458572812 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0380469679306 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0775304432712 0.150856017488 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00484383725199 0.0645574589148 8% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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