Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, we are seeing a different approach between fans and famous people. However, some citzens say that anyone has the privilege to have more or less privacy than others. I can think about many distinct reasons to give up the idea which notorious people have a traditional life and their privacy are respected.
First, today with a tremendous comunication over the world, we are living an interesting human behavior. if an athlete or an actor lives and works in Europe, everybody worldwide can recognize him. even if the person tries to be unrecognized, it is impossible because his image is easily shared between us. Due to a huge circulation of personalities' pictures, even a old madam has the ability to recognize a movie theater actor or a soccer player. Honestly, it is impossible for a famous person to go shopping in a mall without stopping to give attention to a fan. Absolutely we changed the speed how a person becomes a personality. today is not unusual to heard that someone became famous from night to day.
Second, today we are facing the biggest modification in the world with the social media. Despite the idea to be good or not to have our personal life showed to every one, artists and athletes need to have this kind of exposure. Furthermore, some important people use Instagram, Facebook, or Tik Tok, as their way to be more important and make more money. And we have some people that are just famous in this kind of media. Thus, we created a new way to promote someone as a personality, that we did not have in the past.
To conclude, in the past actors or sporting personalities had a calm life, if we compare with today. After the world's modernization with mobile phones sharing pictures worldwide and the beggining of some social media, famous people changed dramatically their lifes.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, honestly, however, if, second, so, thus, kind of, more or less
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1502.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 314.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78343949045 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74532637575 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.566878980892 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 504.0 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.4250157318 48.9658058833 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 88.3529411765 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4705882353 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.82352941176 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161671483984 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0516742160364 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0454457634028 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104669215045 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0597870275383 0.0645574589148 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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