Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
Whereas some people disrespect the privacy of famous entertainers and athletes, I believe they deserve more privacy than they have now for the following reasons which will be further explored in the following essay.
To begin with, protecting the privacy of celebrities and athletes is crucial for the safety of the celebrities and their fans as well. These enthusiastic fans could cluster in groups to meet their idols. Thus, creating too many stampedes which might endanger their lives and the life of the celebrity if the crowd gets out of control. For example, a famous Turkish Tv star named “ Jan Yaman” travels across the world. Whenever he arrives at any international airport, his loyal fans block the airport and create traffic that could endanger their lives in case of emergency. Also, it encroaches on the safety of the TV star. If there are some rules that protect the privacy of celebrities, there won’t be chaos that might disturb their personal lives. Also, there won’t be any danger to their fans as well.
In addition, famous entertainers and athletes deserve more privacy because they are humans who make mistakes. However, many young adults and teenagers look up to them as their idols. So, they imitate their idols without thinking and this could enhance bad behavior. Because these young people are not mature enough to differentiate between the right behavior and the wrong one. Also, they are not aware of the bad consequences of this bad behavior. For instance, a celebrity could be a drug abuser, or a glorious athlete might commit adultery secretly. Therefore, protecting these celebrities’ private life is inevitable for the protection of our youth from imitating negative behaviors. Obviously, No one is perfect, and we all have our flaws, but our daily life is not always on spot like celebrities. If a celebrity’s life isn’t always exposed, youth and teenagers will probably copy their good behavior.
To sum up, Famous entertainers and athletes deserve more privacy for their safety and their fans’ safety and to be good idols to the youth.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, so, therefore, thus, well, whereas, for example, for instance, in addition, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1750.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 344.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08720930233 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6460770784 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.53488372093 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 542.7 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.9663538364 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.1052631579 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1052631579 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.84210526316 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173748005431 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.052965711857 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0918105887977 0.0737576698707 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157761706227 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.118213148536 0.0645574589148 183% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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