Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
Entertainment and sports have become a part of people's everyday life through the television sets, phones and computers. With the constant viewing of movies and sports, the entertainers and athletes tend to become a part of their life too.
I definitely agree with the fact that entertainers and athletes should have more privacy.
Firstly, media and news reporters have made their life a living hell.
The media wants to capture everything that the entertainers and athletes do, they want to know every single detail of whats happening in their personal life. The sad part is that whatever the media captures, common people like us,are actually interested to know more.
The keen interest shown by people, coaxes the paparazzi to invade more into their lives and scrutinize the minutest event.
I am of the conviction that they have worked extremely hard to reach at the apogee of their career.
Many sleepless nights and slogging for days has made them famous personalities and they deserve respect and privacy in return.
Moreover, The famous stars and sports people are usually trained and told how to behave for tv appearances and shots. They get very little time of the day to be themselves and do something which is not being told.
In that small window of time, when they step out of their house to meet a friend or relative,there are immediately thousand of people flocking around them to capture one shot. An occasion is created by blowing up the story out of the most trivial thing.
This leads to the stars floundering around looking for a spot where they can't be seen. The car windows are tainted black or they disguise themselves to avoid any complications.
It eventually ends up with frustration, where the person is crying out loud for some personal space without being judged and criticized.
Although, the life of fame is pleasurable and flashy, its not a piece of cake. All the glitter that is visible is a result of hard work. In spite of earning a lot of money, the contentment is very little since,one cannot behave like a normal human being. If he/she can't socialize or interact the way they want.
it sometimes ends up in depression. For eg, an actress committed suicide due to stress and depression. The health was further hampered by the loneliness in her life.
Facts state that loneliness is equivalent to 10 cigarettes a day.
To conclude, the top stars of the entertainment and sports industries should be able to live the way they want to without the fear of being caught on camera.
Everything they do should not be escalated to many degrees, which ultimately results in an explosion of their emotions. Every profession should be respected and the encroachment into the personal lives should be curtailed.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, firstly, if, look, moreover, so, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2298.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 465.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94193548387 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68382099485 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537634408602 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 699.3 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 12.0 3.08781362007 389% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.6921836234 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.1111111111 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2222222222 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.25925925926 5.45110844103 41% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 16.0 4.53405017921 353% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166410304102 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.04425137229 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0578313529908 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0629254119844 0.150856017488 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0666057052868 0.0645574589148 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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