Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Without any shadow of doubt, privacy is one of the most important parts of our lives. anyone deserves privacy and it is his or her human right. Some people believe that popular people like Oprah Winfrey, does not need privacy because they are famous, but others have a negative attitude toward it. Personally, I believe everyone, even popular celebrities, deserves to have privacy. I feel this way for several reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, in this modern society and the development of technology and especially the internet itself, it is hard for anyone to keep his or her life private. Athletes, celebrities and famous entertainers are not separated from others. All of these celebrities have families, and their families deserve some privacy so that can pursue their goals and focus on their lives. Moreover, their children might be affected by the constant interrupting of paparazzi and photographers of yellow magazines. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. I had an uncle who was an Olympic champion 10 years ago and was famous in our country for his fantastic work as a basketball player, but he was disrupted by journalists and photographers in the streets. they even went by his house and he did not have a minute to himself. eventually, he was so angry that he finally gave up and decided to leave the country and start a fresh and new life somewhere so that no one knows him.
Secondly, if someone frequently seeks the life of celebrities and famous people, he or she might end up distracted by these kinds of lifestyle and finally forget about his or her goals in life. More importantly, he or she might hurt someone, even himself. For instance, I had a friend named Johny and he always spends his free time reading yellow magazines about celebrities' relationships and looked up their photos and their houses on the internet. He was obsessed with some famous entertainers in one of our national channels. One day he tried to follow her to her house to find out where he leaves but she found out and called the police. finally, he ended up losing his job and spent a few months in jail. just because he got in the middle of these kinds of activities. This experience taught me that although all of the social media is steeped in gossip about famous people, we should not spend our precious time following these kinds of new.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that it is our human right to have privacy and we should not spend time chasing famous people's lifestyles because not only this action is so wrong and it might end up hurting them, but also it is a waste of time and money.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 32.0 13.8261648746 231% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 76.0 43.0788530466 176% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2197.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 468.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69444444444 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65116196802 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61923282615 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512820512821 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 700.2 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.9151899143 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.8636363636 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2727272727 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.36363636364 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131153597451 0.236089414692 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0446412906798 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0399439203597 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0932212060018 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0405267663105 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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