Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Games are as important for adults as they are for children. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Computer games are one of the most significant entertainment not only for kids, but also for adults. It helps us with spending time in good mood with family, or helps us kill the free time. Some people may believe that games are same important for adults as for kids, other disagree with that statement. In my opinion, second statement is correct, which I will explain in two main reasons.
Firstly, Adults are thinking about starting their own family. When the right time comes, people’s instinct of having a baby is awakening, but to make a kid we need two people, woman and man. That means people need to spend enormous amount of time to find their second half, get married and born children. Consequently, they do not have time to play on games. For example, my friend Tom, who is a huge fan of World of Warcraft game, decided to move on and find a girlfriend and get married. It is naturally that it cannot be done instantly. It takes a lot of time to pick the right girl for the rest of life. Thus, he had less time to play on his favorite game.
Finally, Adults need to work to get money necessary to survive. This is how our fast growing and extremally difficult world works. So, without money we cannot afford to get basic supplies to live. Working and earning money is our primary objective. Therefore, adults do not have enough time to manage gaming with going to work. For instance, I remember when I was young, I had a lot of time to spend on games but after all this years I grew up. Because of that, I was forced to start working to get money for living. Thus, my free time for games passed out.
In conclusion, Games are good for kids, but adults have more important priorities than games. Earning money and starting own family are basic human responsibilities way more necessary than playing in games like in childhood times.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...of time to spend on games but after all this years I grew up. Because of that, I was...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, firstly, if, may, second, so, therefore, thus, after all, as for, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1524.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 335.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.54925373134 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43097630611 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.55223880597 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 473.4 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.1052876398 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 69.2727272727 100.406767564 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2272727273 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.36363636364 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242420638072 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0733695780043 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0793263642589 0.0737576698707 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158029612375 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0640842242681 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.6 11.7677419355 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.52 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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