Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Government are doing good in educating people to pay attention to the importance of the food nutrition and healthy eating?
It becomes more and more urgent for many countries to keep the society being aware of the importance of health food. The are various reasons for the necessity for governments to advocate for this. Undoubtedly, nutritious food and healthier diets can be beneficial for people’s life. Moreover, healthier population can compensate the urgency of aging, as well as decreasing the social welfare costs. But are the governments doing good enough on this task? From what I can see, there are more the government can do when it comes to educating and providing efficient solutions in order to make people to lay more attention on taking healthier diets.
As one of the limitations, insufficient advertising on food nutrition, is required to be enhanced. People, especially elder ones, who went through difficult ages when there were no enough food and people got starved at that period, sometimes tend to consume more staple foods, like rice and noodles. This outdated eating habits should be diminished with constant education. But like my grandparents, who take the public service advertising more seriously, if they are broadcasted on the national televisions, finally be convinced to have more vegetables and protein in their diets, after I showed them the ads for several times. So I think that, governments, as the authority, should utilize the public broadcasting more effectively to deliver the ideas on healthier eating.
At the same time, governments should encourage practitioners in the agriculture industry to grow more healthier foods using promoted technologies. The higher prices of the organic foods in the market sometimes keep people away from these healthier choices. Nowadays, in the supermarket, the price of a bag of organic tomatoes is twice than the usual ones. How to lower the price and encourage people to buy healthier foods, depends on proactive actions of governments to formulate policies in favor of farmers or firms, who can engage in producing nutritious foods in lower costs. With cheaper prices, along with the effective education delivered, people can be more willingly to accept the propaganda of eating healthier foods, like organic vegetables and fruits, and lve a more high quality life.
To wrap up aforementioned arguments, I’d like to say, there are still room for improvement for our governments to invest more on encouraging people to develop a diverse and nutritious eating habits.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 118, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...aware of the importance of health food. The are various reasons for the necessity for g...
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Line 1, column 268, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nd healthier diets can be beneficial for people’s life. Moreover, healthier popul...
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Line 5, column 98, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'healthier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: healthier
...ers in the agriculture industry to grow more healthier foods using promoted technologies. The ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, if, moreover, so, still, well, i think, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 43.0788530466 39% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2049.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 387.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29457364341 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91973428009 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565891472868 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 642.6 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.2233471216 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.529411765 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7647058824 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.76470588235 5.45110844103 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172032260115 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0625976307955 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0563470179635 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104964756084 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0457087280253 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 58.1214874552 70% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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