Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state sponsored Olympic teams Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Sports activities have a tremendous impact on people's life especially youngsters. From my vantage points, I believe that the government should enhance athletic activities for the following reasons.

To begin with, developing the sports field could encourage people to perform sports activities. For instance, if the governments enhance the sports equipment in the public gems that will motivate young individuals to do outwork activities. When I lived on campus, I did not like to go to the college's gem because all sports machines ware too old and some of them were distorted, like a treadmill. Moreover, the college did not make regular renovations for it. As a result, i did not like to go to the gem. On the other hand, my friends studied at a private college. The dean was very interested in entertainment activities. He specialized a specific amount of college money to enhance sports activities and teams. Therefore, My friends spent most of his time playing exercises and perform outwork activities.

In addition, enhancing sports activities could help governments to save a lot of money. For instance, when the government takes care of athletic games. the number of people playing these activities would increase. that will encourage individuals in these activities. Consequently, playing sports activities are reduced by many people to expose many contemporary disorders like high blood pressure and blood sugar. In many countries like the USA, governments pay for medical insurance for seniors and teenagers. When these people play sport games, they will reduce them to expose for many of diseases. as a result, The government will save alot of money because an increasing number of people have good health.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, if, moreover, so, therefore, for instance, in addition, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 15.1003584229 20% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 43.0788530466 44% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1454.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 275.0 407.700716846 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28727272727 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89744487037 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 212.727598566 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.538181818182 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 453.6 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.8585864264 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.5263157895 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.4736842105 20.6045352989 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05263157895 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0619633595199 0.236089414692 26% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0226140001876 0.076458572812 30% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0309014284869 0.0737576698707 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0521242553957 0.150856017488 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0169434076505 0.0645574589148 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 10.1575268817 87% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.81 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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