Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state sponsored Olympic teams Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Today, governments can affect all fields, and this is because they have to decide about them. Art and sport are two important issues that government should decide which of them should gain more financial aid. From my personal angle, governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explain in the following paragraphs.

First of all, since there is a strong tie between art and our spirit, so art can play a key role in our life. this fact is also inferred from cave paintings. Needless to say, people spend most of their time in connection with art, this is because of its influence on their minds. For instance, people listen to music to relieve their stress level or sadness, or they read books because it can be informative and increase their ability in their personal life, which is relevant to their spirit. Undoubtedly, governments should spend money in support of arts as it is crucial in people's lives and their mental health. If people have healthy minds and spirits, our society can be more profitable. Though athletics may encourage people to do exercise, which can be effective on their health, all people do not follow it and pay attention. Therefore, it can not be as effective as arts in their life.

Secondly, arts are important in our history and political issues. Artists, including writers, musicians, and painters, can narrate historical stories in their artworks, which are important for the future. People, by reading and watching and listening to artworks, gain information about their heritage, which is useful as experiments in their current life and societies. In addition, artists can show their protest toward their economical and political issues, and increase people's awareness. For example, many films have been created about world war II which showed why it happened, and why many innocent people and children were killed. And they could illustrate the real image of wars, so it can cause to prevent future wars because of people's awareness. Had governments spend more money in support of arts, artists can produce more artworks precise and in great detail for the future and nowadays' people.

In conclusion, I believe that government should allocate more money in support of arts, this is because arts are useful in people's mental health. Moreover, arts are valuable in history and politics.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 111, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...so art can play a key role in our life. this fact is also inferred from cave paintin...
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Line 5, column 706, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'preventing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'cause' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: preventing
...the real image of wars, so it can cause to prevent future wars because of peoples awarenes...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, for instance, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2020.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 402.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02487562189 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5480409262 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507462686567 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 610.2 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.8113465065 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.1904761905 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1428571429 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192424540578 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0745184330436 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102087346964 0.0737576698707 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163667773592 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0730065779881 0.0645574589148 113% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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