Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Grades (marks) encourage students to learn. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Learning things is a skill and interest of person, which the person develop in its best way when they are interested without any pressure. However sometimes the catalyst student consider for learning is their grades and that give them more reason and enthusiasm to study further which i believe student don't carry for longer time. I will explain these points in below paragraphs.
To begin with, the reason we considered that grades can be reason for students learning that this is how our education system is working. From starting we see our report card, that we get after every exam and things genuinely mentioned in that is grades. If we have scored good marks them parents and teachers will appreciate and then only they consider that student as bright student without knowing the facts that may be the student had mugged up things. Then is the students feel like okay if this is how people will give attention to me then he/she may started studying harder so in this way grades make student learn more but this reason of studying won't be long term beneficial for students. For example hen i was in school , I have friend she always scored good marks , everyone appreciates her so much , she was example of our school. However i once casually ask what you want to pursue further she said dance I was bemused that time then why are you studying so hard and investing whole day on this instead you should give some hour in your interest. So then I realised that she was just studying for grades not for real learning.
To carry on above point we always see some people who have an enormous amount of knowledge but never score much marks, they only score as much is required for level up to next. These are the people who are studying by their choice and interest in their stream. They don't need the external influence to study harder. These people have to achieve in their stream become expert of their interest that's why they are studying. For example when I was studying for my graduation in Physio theray there was sometimes when I was not able to perform well because of some disturbance and that did not disappointed me because i knew that i know the answer and i am capable one, so I easily beat the test when I get back to mental peace neither it happened that when I scored top most rank in college that after that I started studying more. I remain consistent towards my study in both situation because I know these marks are fine but what remain with for longer time is the knowledge i am gaining from studying.
To put in nutshell I believe good grades can encourage students to learn but that learning is influential and won't remain consistent for ever. So the better reason for studying is self interest in stream.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, then, thus, well, for example, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 24.0 11.0286738351 218% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 81.0 43.0788530466 188% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2247.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 489.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59509202454 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70248278971 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.30062896072 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.470347648262 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 685.8 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 83.202044728 48.9658058833 170% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.833333333 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1666666667 20.6045352989 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.94444444444 5.45110844103 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.5376344086 307% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150734336977 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0536312036067 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0567745469119 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110100496976 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0557525898809 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 58.1214874552 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.7 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.24 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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