Do you agree or disagree with the following statement？
Grades (marks) encourage students to learn.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Grade, the foundation of the modern education system, has raised wide discussion on whether or not it encourages students to learn. Some people believe that grades definitely increase students' motivation to learn. However, from my perspective, I hold the opinion that grades actually do harm to students' study because of the negative effects it brings to students, the low feedback for some students, and the comprehensive assessment it lacks.
As is known to us all, students nowadays face incredible pressure in school which is deteriorating their physical and mental health. Being pushed by the tight learning schedule and the abundant assignments their teachers hand out, they almost possess no time for their physical exercises. It must be concerned that their body health is decreasing, along with all kinds of diseases that should not appear at their ages. Take my experience as an example. In high school, the daily timeline is so strict that it only gives us twenty minutes to finish lunch, including the waiting time. Moreover, although we do have P.E. classes, they are often occupied by other teachers of major subjects such as Chinese and math. As a consequence, our valuable time for sporting is lost. In addition, long-time pressure does great harm to students' mental health. It has been shown in some reports that a high proportion of students suffer from mental illness.
Those students who always fail to make good grades will be depressed by grades. In order to keep the enthusiasm to study, students must receive constant positive feedback, from which the easiest way is to get a good grade. Nonetheless, those bottom students lack such positive feedback and continuously being disturbed by their unsatisfying grades. Maybe their terrible performance in grades is not due to their mediocre intelligence, but their lack of positive feedback. For instance, one of my friends in my childhood, Mike, is a smart boy. He was gifted in math and expressed intensive interest in math. Unfortunately, he failed his exam in a final test. Losing his confidence since then, he became an ordinary student, losing all his dream of becoming a mathematician which is really a pity.
In summary, for the reasons I mentioned above, I can safely draw the conclusion that grades will sometimes discourage students to learn.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 85, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...n system, has raised wide discussion on whether or not it encourages students to learn. Some p...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, however, if, may, moreover, nonetheless, really, so, then, thus, for instance, in addition, in summary, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1955.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 379.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15831134565 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7920055901 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.598944591029 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 592.2 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.876036466 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.0952380952 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0476190476 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143131884478 0.236089414692 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0428008898366 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.045692260171 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107194772143 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0488928235378 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.35 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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