Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Seeking for a suitable job is considered so important especially in these recent years. It considered crucial since it will eventually define our life pathway for the future. Some people think that individuals who are looking for a job should accept the first promising offer that they recieve. However, some others want to wait until a prefered occupation becomes available for them. In my view, I believe that people must cease the opportunities that they get in their life and begin their career as soon as possible for two main reasons which I am going to explain further.
First, money is an important factor in any persons' life that cannot be ignored easily. If you start your job earlier than others, you can save much more money for your incoming days. For example, my friend Bob liked to open a big dinner near his own town, but he had not enough money and no investors appeal to be partner with him. At first, he was resistant about working in other areas or working for other restaurant owners, however he suddenly decided to accept the first offer he gets and he began his job as a chief assistant in a fast food restaurant where he worked for two to three years. Surprisingly, the manger liked him and doubled his salary every year which let him to save a great amount of money. Then, some years later, with the help of his better financial backgrond, he was able to open his own dinner eventually. So, money has an undeniable role in accepting any offer.
Second, experience is another factor that can boost our success in future opportunities fundamentaly. It is so vital since most of the recruiters prefer to hire employees with at least some past experience in the relevant field of expertise. For instance, I liked working in a chemical company and send a lot of applications every where all around the world, but unfortunately no one was willing to hire me in that period. I started thinking with myself that I can begin a temprory job then when any position opens i would leave this job. I worked in a research group of different nations and my duty was to coordinate their jobs to be coherant. After a short period of time a job offer came to me that they need a chemical engineer with multidisiplinary experience which i absolutely fitted. So, your first job experience can save you sometime.
In conclusion, finding the right job is so much important for any person. They can change our future completely. Accepting first jobs are important since they can help us save money and let us to gain some experience in the area too.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 44, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...st, money is an important factor in any persons life that cannot be ignored easily. If ...
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Line 9, column 191, Rule ID: PAST_EXPERIENCE_MEMORY[1]
Message: Use simply 'experience'.
Suggestion: experience
...er to hire employees with at least some past experience in the relevant field of expertise. For...
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Line 9, column 326, Rule ID: EVERY_WHERE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'everywhere'?
Suggestion: everywhere
... company and send a lot of applications every where all around the world, but unfortunately...
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Line 9, column 516, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...mprory job then when any position opens i would leave this job. I worked in a res...
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Line 9, column 647, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...o coordinate their jobs to be coherant. After a short period of time a job offer came...
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Line 9, column 661, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...heir jobs to be coherant. After a short period of time a job offer came to me that they need a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, look, second, so, then, as to, at least, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2114.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 452.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67699115044 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61088837703 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60381594344 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533185840708 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 674.1 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.6099663408 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.0909090909 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5454545455 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.36363636364 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215786425024 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0675266978747 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0535047804734 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138280051189 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0287756877443 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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