Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.
In the sophisticated world of today, having a job with sufficient income is a requirement of a prosperous life. In this regard, people have to seek hard to find a remarkable position that would satisfy their needs. Some people hold the opinion that it is beneficial for individuals to choose and take a secure job once they got the opportunity. On the other side of the continuum, others believe that people should wait longer and devote more time to find a more satisfying career. I, personally speaking, stand with the former group for two main reasons, on which I will elaborate in the next two paragraphs.
First of all, starting a secure job the second getting the chance would lead to a better position and higher income in the future. At first, people might think it is not their dream job and even it might not fulfill their desire, however, with the passage of time, they will gain more experience and become more skillful, which eventually leads to a promotion and raise in the salary. The more money you make, the more satisfaction of your work you feel. Also, by starting a job at the moment you get the chance to make a plethora of friends and links in your workplace and they would provide you other job opportunities and positions which might be more desirable. Furthermore, people with plenty of connections and friends are more likely to notch up more success. For instance, when I graduated from university, I was looking for a well-paid job at first, but I was not successful, So I have decided to start my career as a draftsman in a big engineering firm. After two years, one of my coworkers suggested me to another firm that was looking for an experienced engineer. I was accepted for that position and became the head of the engineering team just after three years. I wouldn’t have that desirable job if I didn’t accept the first opportunity.
Secondly, nowadays, by growing the population and economic disaster that happened due to the COVID-19 pandemic, unemployment is a major issue in many countries. In this circumstance, devoting a lot of time to find a desirable job might not be a wise choice, as people can start a profession that they have the opportunity, and looking for their dream job simultaneously. It will help them with their financial status, controlling their stress level and their mental health, furthermore even they might become interested in that job gradually. Also, they would have found themselves excessively good at that job which obviates the need for looking for another position.
To conclude, it is significantly advantageous for individuals to choose and take the secure job the moment they got a chance, and then seek for a more satisfying career. Not only does it lead to a better position and higher income in the future, by making them more experienced, but it also prepares them a better financial status and less stress level.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, well, for instance, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2407.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 498.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83333333333 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72397222731 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80780124702 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.473895582329 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 749.7 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.414633817 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.35 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.373296001198 0.236089414692 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117823748303 0.076458572812 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0700162367699 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.234822381351 0.150856017488 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0543048416639 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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