Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying. Use specific reasons and example to support your idea.
Having a decent job has an important effect on people lives. Many people argue that it is better that job seekers to stay for a satisfying job rather than choose any jobs. Others, as I do, believe that people should consider each job opportunities as a fortune and take them as soon as possible. I feel this way for a couple of reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, the job markets have a competitive atmosphere, which is causing to reduce the chances find the dream work. It is true that having a proper job can bring the mental satisfaction for people, but the intense competition of finding a job can make job seeker as a looser. Most of them might form inferiority complex because of the failings in finding a job. My experience is a compelling example of what I mean, my friend Mohsen and I both have studied computer science. After graduation, we started to seek for a job; to me, it was critically important to find a job in the first place because at that time I was the only breadwinner in my family. On the contrary, Mohsen mainly focused to be recruiting at a decent company. After a few weeks of searching I was hired at a company with basic salary, I was working on an hourly basis, however after a while I got promotion and started to work on a contractual basis. At the moment, I am a project manager of the company. But Mohsen, on the other hand, is a disappointed person who always nags about his circumstance. Had Mohsen chose a simple job like me, he would has promoted at his career.
Secondly, trying a job and get more experiences are better than to maintain jobless, which cause to learn new things and benefit from different aspects of that job. By working people not only can make money and earn a living, but can learn new things and do not waste their time. For instance, my friend Mohsen who I mentioned above do not any work experience because he has avoided working which has caused him to lose most job opportunities. If he had worked for small firms, he would has experienced and the chance of finding his dream work would have been increased.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that having a secure job is better than to stay for a dream career. Because the competitive of finding a proper job is very intense and because having a job can help people to get experiences and prepare themselves for a decent job.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 80, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'reducing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'cause' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: reducing
...ompetitive atmosphere, which is causing to reduce the chances find the dream work. It is ...
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Line 2, column 1125, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...en chose a simple job like me, he would has promoted at his career. Secondly, tryi...
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Line 3, column 98, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'learning'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'cause' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: learning
...r than to maintain jobless, which cause to learn new things and benefit from different a...
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Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...he had worked for small firms, he would has experienced and the chance of finding h...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, while, for instance, i feel, i mean, in conclusion, it is true, on the contrary, to begin with, in the first place, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1947.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 434.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.48617511521 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62391008187 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488479262673 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 618.3 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.3780078216 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.35 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 5.45110844103 165% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276854302051 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0919745159203 0.076458572812 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0637952484025 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203268590165 0.150856017488 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0588536799345 0.0645574589148 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.76 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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