Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? If you do not make sure other people (especially influential people or your employers) know about your strengths and accomplishments, you will never get successful in life.
Through history, finding success keys had been one of the prominent milestones of recent decades in psychological topics. Also, this issue has engendered many heated controversies among academicians. Some people may hold the view that environmental factors, such as other people encouragement, are leading circumstances. However, some others may take an opposite viewpoint and believe that ones' personality is more dominant aspect. I personally contend that the former is more acceptable. In the subsequent paragraphs, I will pinpoint my most outstanding reasons.
First off, potential to become triumphant is hidden inside your heart and your belief. The power is inner and when you move, other people can just see the results, your accomplishments; and they do not have any idea about your efforts. Thus as long as you didn’t reach to some implementations, people wouldn’t encourage you or sometimes even help you. So we can infer that their prevailing judgment cannot be fair enough.
Another equally significant point supporting this opinion is that from a theoretical standpoint, mankind beholds the world based on his own conviction. Hence, his bias against your passion may cause to treat you in a way that weakens you; and by following this negative energy, if you choose to give in there would be no achievement to be acclaimed. That’s while someones’ dream may be in contradiction with others’, and this may lead to discouraging people who are running for goals in opposite direction.
Although the aforementioned reasons are the first ones which cross the mind at first glance, they are by no means the only reasons available. Actually, there is another subtle matter be borne in mind; even if others be aware of your capability and previous exploits, there are other factors that might have more important intrude on materializing your dreams and attain success. For instance, I can allude educational, financial, and social level status; which have many impacts on defining goals and the peoples' attitude toward you. Most of them are changeable and could be amended by some efforts. As an example, if a student convinces financial department of university to put some monetary resource for his project; his instructor may become more optimistic about the successful results of his proposal.
To put in briefly, all the enumerated reasons converge to the point that in the path of becoming prosperous, one should aim for improving his endeavor and mindset than others notion. Actually, to construct success castle, one should take into account the fact that when he credits a goal by his heart, no barrier can hinder him, and in the end there are always some people to praise him and relate stories about his success.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
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Message: Did you mean 'treating'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'cause' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: treating
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, briefly, first, hence, however, if, may, so, thus, while, for instance, in brief, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2318.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 443.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23250564334 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96232029504 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595936794582 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 718.2 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.1692622753 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.9 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.15 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.25 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2596316942 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0693321607383 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0830766971087 0.0737576698707 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146435822529 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0943699951373 0.0645574589148 146% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.33 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 86.8835125448 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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