Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The government should spend more money on improving access to the Internet than on public transportation.
Throughout history allocating budget has been regarded as one of the government’s top concerns. They should consider all the priorities and finally make the best decision. It goes without saying that in such a sophisticated world where the technology is growing so fast, a controversial question which is raised regarding this situation is whether governments should spend money on improving technologies like Internet or on other factors such as public transportation. From my vantage point improving internet access should be one the government’s top priorities. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that by improving access to the internet people can benefit from e-service advantages. Such a development allows people to save their time and reduce expenses, since instead of going to the streets they can stay at home and carry out their daily activities such as paying bills and etc. via internet. In conjunction with what mentioned before, there’s also another advantage, using e-services will results in reducing traffic and air pollution.
Furthermore it is established beyond doubt that by improving technology in the last decades internet has become more widespread in all of the world and a great deal of information and knowledge are available through internet. Hence, improving access to the internet is inevitable. To illustrate my point I will provide an example. Nowadays most of the top universities offer their course materials online on their websites, so students from other countries can benefit from them. As you see widespread internet accessibility can elevates all levels of education.
Although the aforementioned reasons are the first ones which cross the mind at first glance, they are by no means the only reasons available. Actually, there is another subtle point which must be borne in mind. By improving access to the internet people can benefit from distance working. Distance working has a wide variety of advantages, air pollution will be reduced as a result of decrease in city traffic load, and people can save more time because they don’t have to transport to their workplace also employee productivity will be increased. The noteworthy statistics, revealed by a recent social research conducted in our country, show that until 2025, seventy percent of direct jobs will be replaced with distance jobs. Which reminds that government should improves rudimentary foundations of accessing to the internet.
To summarize, if one weighs the merits and demerits of the above statement, one realizes that internet is a key to the future. Internet has become an inseparable part of our lives and our development is highly dependent on it. So, governments should certainly invest in improving access to the internet.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Furthermore,
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...hat by improving technology in the last decades internet has become more widespread in ...
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Message: The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: 'improve'
Suggestion: improve
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, finally, first, furthermore, hence, if, regarding, so, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2408.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 447.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3870246085 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04113997514 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543624161074 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 746.1 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.8337357391 48.9658058833 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.454545455 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3181818182 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.13636363636 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267487331717 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0862174530656 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0833063556619 0.0737576698707 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150256848475 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0569630098366 0.0645574589148 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 86.8835125448 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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