Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is beneficial for the public to know celebrities’, such as musicians’ or sportsmen’s, political views.
In this advanced world in which we live, there is much information and data which goes around us. Every day, we see a lot of news about the celebrities or hear through the radio or TV. While some people ignore this news and believe that they are just trash, others, like me, disagree. I concur that we should follow our well-known politicians, musicians and sportsmen’s idea. In the following essay, I will elaborate on my point of view.
First, many times those celebrities show a positive attitude and share an invaluable insight about our contemporary daily issues, which can affect our life. Since their voice is heard better than general people's voice, they have a power which helps them be impressive. Those famous people generally have done their duty well in their life, which causes people attracted to them. Those positive aspects of their thought and their action can encourage many folks to behave well. To put into perspective, I know some celebrities in India that they influence their society wonderfully. One of them, named Akbar Khan, recently establish a Non-Profit Organization to help needy people in far-reaching area in New Delhi. Many of his fans follow him in this humanitarian action and in a short time, they made a hospital and a school in the undeveloped community of India. As we can see, knowing about those celebrities character and thought may provide us an excellent opportunity to do an outstanding movement.
Second, celebrities have the power of influence the people thought through the media. In this interwoven era, every sound will be heard as soon as possible, especially if it stems from a famous person. Those politicians, athletes and artists are affecting the whole people, even more than the governments and other authorities. Authorities look at the celebrities as a representative of folks. Furthermore, many times authorities and celebrities accompany in a different issue. When we be aware of our celebrities’ point of view, we can affect them through their social media appearance such as Facebook. Consequently, we can affect celebrities’ idea and then our authorities by giving them our feedback. I remember last two years, in Turkey, one celebrity that has a very strong communication with people, organized a virtual campaign to motivate governor to change their decision. The Turkey Government wanted to change a historical park to a parking lot, but that movement with the athlete’s leadership cause the government accept the people’s idea.
In sum, I believe that our celebrities’ mindset is important, and we should know them. This is because that they affect their followers through their social communication power that they have. They have many positive virtues which worth to know about them. Furthermore, we can affect our governors through our celebrities connection since their voice is heard faster and easier than ours.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 900, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'celebrities'' or 'celebrity's'?
Suggestion: celebrities'; celebrity's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, look, may, second, so, then, well, while, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 74.0 43.0788530466 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2433.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 469.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18763326226 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65364457471 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92174521882 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535181236674 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 753.3 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.6118088364 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.5769230769 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0384615385 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.53846153846 5.45110844103 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.117901246117 0.236089414692 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0390449245858 0.076458572812 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0356265574242 0.0737576698707 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0808073695184 0.150856017488 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0164047584534 0.0645574589148 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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