Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is beneficial for the public to know celebrities’, such as musicians’ or sportsmen’s, political views.
Celebrities are very much influential in our world because people tends to believe what they says and what they feels? In our present world, the practice to become like my idol whoever singer, Hollywood star etc. are widespread. The salubrious effects of models political view is the given prompt- with someone would agree, others are probably not. In my view, their views are rather cast a doubts on our mind because of the following two important reason.
The main reason is that there is a chance to lost self-belief. When, a particular celebrity propagandize a particular belief the person who follows them might have been lost his own judgment. This is the major barrier to form a better society where every views is equally acceptable as well nourishes to practice. For example, the autocratic leader of the Libya where society was once completely based on religion and in that society Muammar Gaddafi was the celebrity like. Moreover, he used his familiarity and suppressed peoples own idealism and belief. These all are dragged the country to become an autocratic nation. As you can see that only following one celebrity leads a country from people country to single person country.
Another reason is that there are plethora of examples where the cumulative views has paramount importance in order to the advancement of the country. A country where every class of people is given equally importance. To be more specific, a few days ago I have been reading an article from Scientific American regarding the critical analysis of American society. It has delineated that, in the USA people are not blindly follow only their celebrity rather they gave importance to the belief of every people either he or she black or white does not a big deal. For this reason, they developed a balance state where models, celebrities, government officials are using same type of transportation. Furthermore, they are not fight on the basis of different political idealism. Apart from that, they respect each other belief and this is the boilerplate of a democratic country. This experience taught me that if we respect everyones belief rather than following particular peoples views then the chance of diversity is forthcoming.
In conclusion, it is possible to argue with me by taking the celebrity sides but in reality they will not convince discreet people. The equality of judgment not only save individual identity but also helps to diversify the nation. So, we should count and revered everyones belief.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 94, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'say'
Suggestion: say
...cause people tends to believe what they says and what they feels? In our present wor...
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Line 1, column 113, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'feel'
Suggestion: feel
...to believe what they says and what they feels? In our present world, the practice to ...
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Line 1, column 390, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a doubt' or simply 'doubts'?
Suggestion: a doubt; doubts
...In my view, their views are rather cast a doubts on our mind because of the following tw...
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Line 3, column 64, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... there is a chance to lost self-belief. When, a particular celebrity propagandize a ...
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Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...country to become an autocratic nation. As you can see that only following one cel...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, moreover, regarding, so, then, well, apart from, for example, in conclusion, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2100.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 412.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09708737864 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71026421136 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563106796117 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 677.7 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.2608226124 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.4545454545 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7272727273 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.22727272727 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.132090364959 0.236089414692 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.034184506163 0.076458572812 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0359616542736 0.0737576698707 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.080072362635 0.150856017488 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.023862185229 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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