Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is beneficial for the public to know celebrities’, such as musicians’ or sportsmen’s, political views.
A controversial issue relating to whether it is worth knowing the celebrities political views or not, has brought to the attention of public. Some people would like to know everything about their favorite celebrities include their political believes.. However, In my opinion, people should avoid or not pay attention to the political views of famous people.
First of all, knowing about what celebrities think of current politics, would sometimes negatively impact your admiration for that person. To put it in other words, if it happens that your favored artist has an opposite political view than yours, that could either influence your own opinion or people will experience a negative feeling about that famous person. For example, when I found out that my favorite musician had a completely different political view than mine. All of the sudden I felt that I lost interest listening to his music. Consequently, just by knowing something, which I easily could have had avoided, I changed my musical preferences. That is why, people should not pay attention to what their admired artist think about politics.
Moreover, shaping opinions about something is very important where people were referred to. This way they could develop that thought and come up with strong arguments to defend that opinion. If people based their thoughts about events on their's favorite celebrities' political views, then the chance to get the wrong assumption would be higher than building the opinion based on academic books and literature. To be more specific, people who listen to other people's opinion and take that as a base information, they could misunderstand what is real and what is false. So, that could lead to a weak comprehension of things. In fact, people should be aware about where to look for correct information, even though there are many famous individuals who share or make their opinions public for their fans.
In conclusion, people should not pay attention to what political view their favor celebrities have. This is because that will negatively impact their preferences. And because they should base their opinions in correct information rather than, on what someone else think.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ely different political view than mine. All of the sudden I felt that I lost interest listening t...
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...ation rather than, on what someone else think.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, however, if, look, moreover, so, then, for example, in conclusion, in fact, first of all, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1842.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 352.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23295454545 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68099346911 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.539772727273 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 565.2 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.5006637414 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.333333333 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5555555556 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.77777777778 5.45110844103 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144375463171 0.236089414692 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0545073541662 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0584106301326 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107443462515 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0563009482797 0.0645574589148 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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