Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The issue of whether that is better for children to choose a similar job that their parent’s jobs is very controversial. On one side, supporters of the idea believe that children should choose similar jobs as their parents. They could benefit from this. On the other hand, critics of this maintain that if children decide to work in a similar as their parents they could be unhappy for the rest of their life. However, after a very careful consideration I maintain the opinion that children should choose similar jobs as their parents, for a few reasons which I will explain below.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that children should follow the footsteps of their parents. This could be a quite advantageous for them. In fact, children will feel support from their parents because they are in the same field. A vivid example to shed light on what I mentioned above is that I chose the same job as my dad. He is dentist and since I was a kid I wanted to study the same career as him. Growing up I realize that this has been my dream and now I can test it. Choosing the same job as my dad has benefited in great amount because he has his own dental office in which I am working as a dentist. Also, as all the patients know that I am her daughter they trust on me as they trust on my father.
The second reason which is worth some thought, is that I did not have to spend a lot of money building my own practice now the business is a family business. Instead many children that choose different jobs as their parents have to invest great amount of money to start their business, but this was not my case. That is why I decided to take the same profession as my dad because I knew he will support me in every moment of my decision.
To wrap up, I strongly believe that choosing the same profession or job that our parents always will benefit us from one side or the other one, so we do not have to be afraid to take that decision. It will be worthy.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 159, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Instead,
... now the business is a family business. Instead many children that choose different job...
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Line 6, column 91, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[10]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put between 'will' and 'benefit'.
Suggestion: will always benefit
...same profession or job that our parents always will benefit us from one side or the other one, so w...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, in fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 70.0 43.0788530466 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1603.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.30913978495 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35349270463 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.465053763441 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 495.9 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.8370756053 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.0555555556 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6666666667 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.83333333333 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.36523511265 0.236089414692 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124716894238 0.076458572812 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.142646955821 0.0737576698707 193% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.227173151459 0.150856017488 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.135106075793 0.0645574589148 209% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.56 58.1214874552 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.72 10.9000537634 71% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.58 8.01818996416 82% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 86.8835125448 53% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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